All Comments on 'No Smoking. Really!'

by onlyinmydreams

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AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
RE: "kissed her full on the lips"; is it true...

...that kissing a smoker is like licking a used ashtray?

...voted 5...

ErotonautErotonautover 11 years ago
What's the betting...

that the first thing Lana does on her next day in work is to strike up, right in front of the nearest camera?

SigmundsIdSigmundsIdabout 10 years ago
Good story, needs a more creative conclusion

I really liked your story here, but a more creative ending could have given it more punch. How about - one month later, she's caught smoking again and in following through it comes out that it's now become part of her daily or weekly routine? Maybe, now she has to wait in line for her turn? Maybe, some people have now started smoking because they heard about it? (Unintended consequences.) I'm sure you can think of some fun twists to throw in. Good job here!

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