All Comments on 'New Girl'

Can't wait to read more. Hurry and post

Fabulous!! I love this story!!! The set up is unique and well written.......more, PLEASE and as soon as you can, Doll!! xo

Great story would love to play the start role if its ever made into a film ;-)

Who the hell talks like that? It feels like im watching a Child's TV show with a dirty theme. The premise is hot, the dialog is cheesy and awful.

... is not how people talk. At all. Very distracting to the actual story.

The talking is bearable if overdone but that doesn't take away from the story one bit. Imagining the next part and what it involves. Ravished maid, kept as a maid, gf trying to rescue but getting in trouble herself. Can't wait

Cannot wait for part 2.

what a great start well done will be looking for part two for sure and soon i hope

Nice storyline. Good development. I agree with the others, sorry, the dialogue is a bit unnatural. Keep going, though!

sorry a sick story