All Comments on 'Porcelain Altar: redux'

Well.... I am well and thoroughly confused. Is the poet writing computer code in the can?! And..two lids down? Must be a female about...

enjoyed the opening and finish for their originality

this central piece reads as a limerick but, for me, would read even cleaner with either an extra syllable in its last line OR by removing one or two beforehand. for example:

The Anon for the most part are kind.

The Invisible are fickle but fair,

but for the most part I find

the most critical Mind

is the one that sits here in this chair.

OR

The Anon for the most part are kind,

the Invisible fickle but fair;

for the most part I find

the most critical mind

is the one sitting here in this chair/is the one that sits here in this chair.

.......................

edit. x

Now go wash your hands

just my thoughts, HH. don't get in a crappy mood, k? :p

Saw flaws as soon as it dropped

this would have worked to avoid repetion

but actually I find

the most critical Mind

often sits in this chair.

...

Not in a crappy mood, explained concept to Desejo in an EM she may share it with you if you ask

.................. thanks all

Chipbutty you are so sly!

beckons all that falter from the demom spirits, TK U MLJ LV NV

anon no mous

come on out

an show your puss

is that why you put the lid down, harry?

ok i had fun, 5

great!