All Comments on 'The Saturday Shop Girl Ch. 02'

This story could be very good. However, the present draft is just that, a draft, and a rough one to boot. It needs editing and heavy proofing. Either re-work it yourself or pay someone a small fee to look it over for you, because it is deserving of the extra attention.

Post is cut off half way through the story... " To clarify, I.... " Where are the editors and moderators on this board, or do they let people post any old sh!t?

good but not complete