All Comments on 'How High a Price (Simple Solution)'

You tale kept Susan and Early together and got rid of Stickner quickly. I would call that a quick and happy ending.

This classic has many alternative endings. This one is however one of the worst on the site. I say this because Early is too wimpish in this one and forgives Susan way to easily. I guess winterfrog wanted it that way.

as wtih all endings....coda is still coda,,,,TK U MLJ LV NV

good to see you back in action...You and the Fox....TK U MLJ LV NV

Still think Susan got off too easy. Likewise for good ole' John-boy.

What a pity it did not have an ending Most certainly far short of winterfrogs usual

high standards Should have left the original alone and stick to being original

that she stayed at the guys house but did not have sex, get real!

I think it's really neat how this open-ended story has inspired so many alternate endings - and I am fond of Winterfrog's ESL useage - I always understand what he's saying, but it sounds foreign. Very cool, IMHO. This particular story is indeed a simple solution, and seems to be in character for Early - he does love Susan a lot, and gives her the benefit of every doubt. I think it needs a little more length, perhaps an epilog explaining how things work out - I need to know whether they return to a shared bed, and whether Susan is going to cheat the next time opportunity presents itself.

Whether she fucked him or not she still cheated.

Just because in this version Early got to her before she fucked Stickner (we assume) her overnight bag proves she still would have cheated if given the opportunity.

So once again Early gets cucked, and remains married to a slut.

Whoop de Dooo!

Not exactly a happy ending, so I gave you a number two, since it's synonymous with shit.

Good, as far as it went, but we needed to know - even if it was just a short epilogue - how things turned out eventually.

You didn't just END the story, you changed it virtually into a different story. She DID sleep with Stickner and admitted it. HE didn't, by her own admission, seduce her, SHE offered it to him!!

Not your best work, Winterfrog. I've enjoyed most of your stories, this is not one of them.

I'd advise you to continue to write your own from the start and leave the others, like this, alone. You are better suited in the creation of the circumstances that prevail throughout the story.

But, it is always good to see your name on a story, because you are an engaged and interesting author.

Thank you for the effort. Thank you for writing.

Regards,

-Pultoy

But you changed the original story. As pointed out below she did sleep with John, admitted it and even recognized it as her suggestion. By changing the basic facts you do not offer an ending to the original story as suggested but wrote a different one without all the problems of the original... You did add on a new one here in that she is pregnant before the start. Personally besides her intentions, I reacted negatively to the idea that because she was pregnant she could risk an affair without problems. They a re never without problems, and it is exactly the moment when she should be most loving toward her life partner. To the curb with this Susan!

We are led to believe she did not quite fuck Stickner yet. In reality, Susan might have been screwing Stickner for a while and the baby is not really Early's. Another possible ending, and one that is more plausible, I think.

I usually like your stories but this one didn't come up to your usual standard. It felt rather disjointed and I think you used some cliche's from numerous other stories to push it along. Sorry Frog but this one fell flat for me.

Vulcan_in_Ohio wrote: "In reality, Susan might have been screwing Stickner for a while and the baby is not really Early's."

Maybe in your reality, but not in the real story:

"When Susan had said "No thanks" to many great cheating opportunities she had been teased that she was a nun. She had understood that now, before she had her baby, was her great chance to taste some forbidden fruit in the paradise. So she, after several doubts, accepted John Stickner's suggestion to be with him from Thursday lunch to late Saturday evening. "

This is the author telling us what was going on inside Susan's mind. It isn't something she told Early that might be a lie. She can't lie to Winterfrog because he is the author. In the reality of this story, Susan HAD NOT been involved in cheating behavior before, and the baby IS Early's.

What you mean is that YOU WOULD HAVE LIKED IT BETTER if Susan had been your stereotype of a worthless cheating bitch. Fine, write your own story and it can be any way you want it to be. I'm sure LW could use a few more ritualistic revenge stories -- don't leave out the part where sells her to a Mexican brothel! -- and no one is stopping you.

You didn't write an alternative ending. You rewrote the original changing several key factors. In turn, changing the dynamics of the story and the gravity of the decision that Early was left to make at the end of the original story. Troubador invited other authors to write their own endings. Not to rewrite the original. I wonder if you are subject to copywrite laws if Troubador wants to sue. [ Now for my rendition]

"Susan turned to John Stickner and said, "Thank you John for all your help. I am forever in your debt. If there is ever anything I can do for you, please just let me know and I wil make it happen. That's a very generous offer Susan, John replied while leering at her perfect figure. How about coming over to my house for the weekend while your husband is out of town for some dinner, a little hot tub and then you can show your appreciation by becoming more intimate with my huge law maker. All of a sudden the law offices of Jenson, Sharone and Anderson were filled with the most pathetic sound that anybody has ever heard. As everyone ran out into the halls to see what could possibly be making such a hideous noise they observed Senior Partner, John Stickner writhing on the floor while holding his crotch while spittle and unintelligible cursing emanated from his mouth. Just then the front office doors were heard closing as a smirking Susan was seen walking towards her automobile. Once inside she thought to herself ,"Is that intimate enough for you John, you fat old pig?" I can't wait to tell Early about this and he thinks I need protection from the likes of Stickner. Men, what a laugh. And that's what she did all the way home." THE END

First, there are two very significant changes to the original 'set-up' ... those are pregnancy and early confrontation. The first ostensibly puts pressure on Hubby to NOT divorce the 'mother-of-his-child!' The second is a well-established WinterFrog penchant to stop everything precipitously. However, those make this a different story, so WF has a roughly parallel story, which is OK, but should have been titled differently so it is NOT listed adjacent to the continuations!

Somewhat less significant - WF also offers Sweetie's past history of being propositioned. VulcanOH posits that the Bull could be the sperm-donor for Sweetie's fetus (and her quoted denials to her Hubby COULD be confabulated) BUT her thoughts (as added by WF) settle that as false. Hubby is acknowledged in her thoughts as her only partner during the period she was de-periodized! However, Sweetie's claim that she and the Bull did NOT have sex is TOTALLY implausible! WF kept the cheating to a minimum, but a 'panty check' would almost certainly show Bull DNA! "We didn't get it on because he was more excited about a new Beemer and dinner!" SURE!!!

Very unsatisfactory continuation. A 'not terrible' new story. 3*

he said you could finish the story and not alter what he wrote. + it was not nearly good done. sorry try harder if you anwser somebody's story

Take a poll of 100 husbands and ask how many would react to a cheating wife in this manner. I'd be willing to bet that 101 would act in just the opposite way as this fool. Why do people want to write stories about husbands who act like cheating was about as upsetting as his wife burning supper? Please, buy a set of balls and put them on the next husband you write about.

Winterfrog's voice is gone! Either edited out or an impostor is using the identity. Sorry, I found nothing of much interest in this story. Early was cold, impersonal and emotionless. Winterfrog's characters are real, passionate, with action!

Dump the editor, go thou and sin no more!

Chilley

The cheaters got off way to easy for this to be Winterfrog's work.

Not your best. What happened?

Okay some of us didn't like the fact that he put them back together. It was still well written and the thing I liked the most is that he had the guts to try it. How high a price is without a doubt a classic of LW stories. It's like the see dick run story for LW writers. We've all read it ( I have at least ten times) but in this day and age very few of us even have the courage to try to write an ending for it. Doing so is like trying to add something to the Mona Lisa. Every good angle and idea of an ending for the story has been done and done well. I think we should compliment WinterFrog for having the courage to try. I've enjoyed many of his great stories and see this as a way of him stretching out his skill as a writer. We all need to do that from time to time. Way to go Frog. SS06

I felt that the storyline was well thought out and the story was well written.

It seems as if she had to give up a lot, being that she is a career oriented hard driving personality, just to try and save her marriage.

It would be hard to throw a woman out who he loved so much, after she gave up so much to stay with him.

Thanks for the read.

As for me, not a WinterFrog reader, I really liked this story. It laid everything out in terms of REALITY and left no doubt, no "GRAY" area, of the crime and the high price to be paid. I loved it.

If you look at any of his stories if there has been no sex and the wife comes to her senses Winterfrog usually finds a way for reconciliation. My problem is that Susan really has no remorse for her actions. She set up the entire weekend with Stickner, taking off early from work for the weekend, making sure that her husband was out of town, grabbing her sexy clothes including a gift from her husband to impress her lover, checking her husband's hotel to make sure he was there and lying about her whereabouts when her husband called her. When questioned by her husband she readily admitted that she would have fucked him if she had the time. Susan's biggest regret is getting caught. So what is Susan's price - getting up her partnership, getting tested for STD and sleeping in a separate bed? Huh! Although she gave up her job you better believe it that she will be back to work when things cool down probably after her child or children is born. My question is who would want this type of woman to be the mother of your children? Remember her actions were coldly calculated not some silly mistake! Despite my problem with the ending- Winterfrog - the story was well written and an improvement on the original. Thanks!

For the read.

is that it is not the same story. it was one of WF's "going to catch you if you do it" stories and he is great at that. to own this one he had to get there when there was no fucking and make her pregnant too. in the real story she was already fucking him and not pregnant - or i dont think she was. but i love WF's stories, but not this one.

There is nothing about the story which is remotely connected to the original story by troubadour. The challenge from that author was to write a continuation of that story-- presumably with a middle and a end. In this case this mentally disturbed blithering idiot that passes for a author seemed unable to follow basic and simple directions and developed a whole new story.

Even if we accept the premise of THIS story Early (the husband) opens up her overnight the and spills of all sorts of lingerie stockings and high heels.

He and says that if we are going to make this marriage work susan is going to have to choose between Jiohn Strickner and him.

The problem here is that every body else already knows that she made the decision already.

Your complete lack of understanding of human nature has you writing impossible scenarios.

Best you keep reading awhile longer.

The author changed the characters in a fundamental way, so it seemed less a sequal or even a mild re-imagining of the story and more of a completely new story with a similar set-up. What made the Troubadore's story so compelling was the not the set-up as such, but rather the characters: the wife's muddled thinking, rationalizations and protestations, and the hubby's dillemma in facing a very serious (but isolated) betrayal with multi-faceted consequences.

In this story, the actual betrayal (presumably) is never consummated. What I liked about it was that it was a simple solution: Early didn't play out the fiction-he confronted early (Early...hmmmm....), and addressed the issue with firmness and decision. Part of what bugged me about the character in the original was his wishy-washy nature, and the fact that he let the betrayal play out. Here, he didn't; but that did totally transform the storyline into something completely different.

IMHO, it also deflated much of the drama, and it became a rather straightforward, dry story.

As stated before, you really didn't continue the story. Also, your male figures usually don't listen to bullshit excuses and wimp out. Are you dabbling with the wimp scenario?

An alternate version, rather than an alternate ending. Thanks for the offering.

He turned Early into a wimp. That sucks.

The basic change is not that great - while WF did invent some earlier behavior to discredit Stickner it is not really enough to violate the original story line too much -

We do see the change at the point where early sits and let's the worst happen without direct intervention - which allowed the long term solution to move forward here with out the act being finalized - but the betrayal of trust was completed. For many that is a small improvement to the potential outcome BUT it is a difference.

This story had no wimp but a man who called a halt and made it clear - come home, end it or else! She came home, they moved on - a little too easily but author's choice -

you forgot to have hubby check her pussy to see if it had been recently used. ok, and DNA for the baby.

She said she was resigning, and we are told it would be a big hit to the firm. I can see the law firm either letting her go and keeping Stickler, or having her withdraw her resignation if they fired Stickler. Reasonable choices.

But to loose two partners, that would have been a real hit, and seems unreasonable.

Also your 'voice' was nearly edited out, which is a negative IMO.

Still I enjoyed the story

Chilley

She had already cheated in thought, word and in deed. She just had not fucked Stickner. So why continue with the sham? Who needs this kind of shit? Who needs a partner looking for a better deal while you are hard at work? Who needs to wonder when she will try it again? Enough! Get out and Grow up you stupid bitch!

Unprocessed offal.

Endings to this story. It seems Winterfrog only read the character names in the original, and then wrote his own usual wimp husband forgiving the cheating slut stories. When a proven liar says "Honey I never cheated and love only you", the wimp idiot believes it and all is forgiven? Banal.

Read Longhorn07`s version for a great and realistic ending.

But my problem is that nowhere in this story had shit hit the fan. Pity, this seems to be Frogs trademark. 2* .

Since she was the subordinate employee with at least implied pressure to submit, she should be able to keep her job if she chooses.

Highly unlikely that you wrote this story yourself - the language used here is too perfect: having read some of your other stories shows me that English is not your native language (of course, you are Scandinavian) with many spelling mistakes and poor Syntax....

Having said that, I find your plot better than many that your fellow authors used for an alternative to the original tory by Troubadour. 4 stars!!

not one of the better alternative endings.

IS EZ.....use the same characters...same plot....BTB heavily----kiss and make up...request outside help...etc etc etc...TK U MLJ LV NV

Justifying what she intended to..cheating bitch by intend.

Different approach, I like this one! why? Early instead of just playing phone tag with no back bone, as on other stories, he confronts her right away telling her point blank she is at Strickners kitchen, not at home because he is home now and has 20 min to get home or stay there and her things will be outside... that is classic true to life how any man would handle a suspicious situation or more to the point inappropriate position their spouse is in. You can also toss in, this is the perfect way to handle a lie in the present situation JUST STAND UP TAKE CHARGE. Well done

He should have divorced Susan so she could not give him several more kids to lock him into a marriage as a quasi-wimp. Stickner should have been dealt with physically or legally. If a good search could not uncover legal wrongdoing he should have had a couple of friends (or done it himself with a good alibi) break at least one arm, break a knee and stomp his balls. Make that the dominant arm so he will have to learn to feed himself and other things with the off arm and the broken kneecap will make him spend some time in the hospital. And the stomped balls might prevent him seducing someone else's wife. I find that Winterfrog lets straying wives and pussy-hounds get off fairly easily, I am more vindictive.

Re-read the tale and my original comment. I must have been drunk when I wrote it. Happy ending? No revenge and the couple stays together? How about the kid. Who's the father? What the fuck. I've read better endings to this tale.

no rating

“We were cooking a dinner when you rang me.” – If they were just cooking dinner, then why lie?

“Jenson said it would have been difficult to fire Stickner if Susan had kept her job” – I don’t understand that; what does her staying or leaving got to do with anything? If anything, her STAYING would have made firing Stickner more necessary, and his prior complaint helps in either case.

One of the worst of the endings written for How High A Price. Made Early a wimp/willing cuckold. Of course Susan didn't admit her was fucking Stickner. In any event she willingly went to his home with that overnight bag fully intending to commit adultery. At that point she was already a cheater and only Early's intervention short-circuited her adulterous plans. She ran home this time after being caught, next time she'll just plan better. RAAC crap!

Thanks for the effort.

Winterfrog is one of my favorite authors on this site. His protagonists are always clear headed and act with purpose. Usually though, they dispose of the traitor in their midst. In this case it ended with him keeping her? She was cheating on him, sex or no sex, she was cheating on him. He could never trust her again, for anything. Now she is pregnant and she cheats? What kind of a woman cheats when she is carrying her husband's child? What about VD and the child? What about the big plans for the future family? This woman acts like a typical depraved lawyer. Best to divorce her and move on.

what he said below me

It wasn't an evening. It was two days and nights. I expected better from Winterfrog.

I stumbled upon the story by the Troubador, while reading another author and his follow-up version. Intrigued I have decided to read all of the "How High a Price" submissions. So far, most are really good.

Then I come to this story, in which the author did not follow the request of the original author. The author's request was to take his story, as written, and write your own ending. The continued story should not stand alone.

Winterfrog, I will say your prose is well developed and intriguing, but you failed to follow the Troubador's request. Your story is basically his story re-written, almost to the point plagiarism. Of course, this is only my hunble opinion.

She keeps saying "Believe me" after she was caught in a bald-faced lie!

A true cuckold lover to write Early this way. I suspect Winterfrog eats his wife's lovers cum from her pussy in order to get off.

Certainly not the best sequel to Troubadour’s original story. In fact I don’t think it’s even one of the better ones. D

Ennnuffff. Said

their own worse advocater. TK U MLJ LV NV

Early needs to divorce Susan. She wanted to cheat if she had not so already done so previously.

....which sadly looks like an amalgam of other’s extensions, but told in your own, somewhat stilted way.

I admire your willingness to risk disdain from your audience by writing in a second language to your own, but you seriously need editorial help from a native English speaking editorial volunteer.......and you need to come up with better content than a rehash and re-combination of other already extant follow-up stories.

I have read many various endings to this storey and this is the best one for me as he ‘hits’ back at his wife as soon as she lies saying she is at home when he is. This stops her committing adultery or so it seems and this should have happened in the original storey.

if she didn't sleep with Stickner then why the STD test also her hair and clothes were a mess when she got home did she really have sex with him or not. I do like the part where he confronted her right up front not like most of the wimp husbands on this site.

I love your stories but in this one I am deceptioned.

Must give you a two.

Who knew Winterfrog could write without a Scandinavian accent. Still he never disappoints.

Makeup etc how did it get that way if nothing happened

Secretary should have been fired

6 months pay cheap as company personnel aided and abetted therefore law suit

Writer's English grammar and structure etc best of his stories I have read so far

I am one of your fans. But this story has a name in my mind that is “bull shit”.

Even though I realize that the story is fiction she deserves a kick in her behind and pregnant or not she would be in the process of a divorce within twenty four hours.

he did write with a Scandinavian accent - he made the guy a spineless subhuman piece of shit who kept the cheating cunt

That IS his Scandinavian accent

I've read the competing alternate endings in date order and was disappointed within your attempt. The only new item was Susan's pregnancy. Otherwise, I found nothing to get excited about. Three stars.

Not remotely credible. Susan would NEVER willingly give up a law partnership. She came home looking freshly fucked, so she was!!! Divorce was the ONLY option for a REAL MAN and not a CUCK...

What's the point of writing a continuation/ending of a story if you are going to change what happened in the original story? It's not like the template for the story itself is that unique, it's the classic "husband comes home early from a business trip" trope given some extra flair in the original

Mr Winterfrog you rushed this 'ending' and with little thought. Never mind, you tried.

Well

Quick ending but it wasn't bad. Not enough information shared about how their life would go after the cheating but I.ve read worse.

End as a raac? Every version rewrites the story to to make the plotting slut innocent or Early a wimp that takes her back. I'm still waiting for a version that has any logic or intelligence. Going by the original, divorce is the only option. Why rewrite the story to say she was blackmailed, when that is totally different from the original? Originally she said it was something that she owed him, something beautiful. She got angry when Early said it was tawdry. That is not someone getting blackmailed or tricked.

This is a steaming pile.

Never take back skank!

waste utter waste

I generally like most of the stuff WF writes because of swift actions of normal males and lightness of the plots regardless of how difficult the topics are. He is also original writer so I was a sort of surprised that he went for somebody else's story. The whole thing is out of his style - the plot is heavy and serious which works for Troubadour (too bad he is not around any more) but it is not the way WF is used to.

This is not bad, it is just too abrupt and too easy of an ending.

Still better than most of garbage on LW.

Very weak.

Unfinished "finish" to an unfinished story.

Ridiculous garbage to be honest.

Why is this considered weak? The husband did what anyone should have done and called her bluff / lie. She came back. Yes they need counseling and long time to sort through this crap. John got fired. What more do you all want? By definition, Early is not a cuck. It is like in Laws of the Heart, the MC should have stepped in at the luau or the hot tub, or knocked on the hotel room door. Then deal with the fall out. The letting it play out is the stupidest strategy.

1*. This is the 4th ending to troubadours invitation I read, and thin one isn't worth the time it took to click the link, sorry. No Flair, no vocabulary, no Feelings, no depth or understanding of the characters.

Und wo ist das Ende??????

You had the right idea, but you just couldn't pull it off. Changing the original story kind of violates the spirit of it, but the original left things locked in on a bad course so I understand it. Unfortunately, your characterizations were shallow and you just skimmed the deeper issues, making it a disappointing read.

Early and Susan were too quick in absolving the law firm from responsibility. If Stickner had been warned by his partners regarding a prior case of sexual misconduct, he clearly needed to be under greater supervision in his dealings with female subordinates. The firm had a responsibility to protect foreseeable victims if Stickner did not heed the warning he had been given. The firm failed to meet that responsibility and is liable for the tortious injuries Susan and Early suffered. I suspect $3 million for Susan and $2 million for Early would help both to begin putting this unpleasantness behind them.

I’m sorry but that was just piss poor writing. It added nothing to the original story and the husband was still just a weak idiot.

Dumb

still not finished.

Sorry but this geeky like a play by play post have summary of a baseball game. Shit, even that would have a bit of pain in it. No nice conceptual take.. not cheating though almost cheating... But no depth. Accepted that she's telling the truth without addressing what Street planned to do.

Shoot... Mobile autocorrect. Let me fix my post. This read like a play by play

Good, but it contradicts the original story. Here you minimize Susan's guilt.

Nope, poor sequel. Poorly written, disjointed. Just not smoothly put together.

It cant be called a continuation if you change the basic facts that there was an affair. Wronglt titled and misleading

Very lame and not worth reading. This wasn't an ending to the original story, it's a very different story and still lame.

sorry poor response to the original story

Actually the first page was quite well done. The critics bemoaning it, apparently want the formulaic husband who is passive and waits while the slut wife cheats. He took action immediately as almost any husband would. He demanded she quit her job, and she did in a heartbeat. The ending seems kind of thin. And honestly a lot more work have to be done to fix the marriage. To those who think there is no difference from intent to cheat and actual consummation: I hope you never have to learn the hard lesson in how they are not the same. 4 stars.