and for those who remember the migrations ..TK U MLJ LV NV
that you are !!!
This feels to me as though it might benefit from an edit. For example do you need any of the first three lines before "I Did" - "wonted" is accurate but is its archaism distracting? - I dunno. You might consider a comma after "rain." - Two syllable "nestlings" breaks up the musicality just a tad. One syllable, young, or something like that possibly? - Drop "away"? and "beyond the hill" perhaps. A 4.5 so I'll go slightly higher
On the other hand, you can ignore my meanderings.
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