All Comments on 'My Beautiful Daughter'

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snakebytesnakebyteover 11 years ago
Great Story

I loved your story, it was hot. A sequel to it would be amazing I think

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
fucking wonderful

Absolutely red hot,sucking and fucking to a mind blowing cum, more and more please and soon. Cunt lapping sex maniac, Lanc's UK

Eric_ShiftEric_Shiftover 11 years ago
I can see you like teasing your audience.

So I want you to stop teasing. Please submit a full story, but please complete something.

You've got great ideas, but it will piss off a lot of readers if you make it a habit. It just feels unfinished.

I hope we get more from you though.

ES

jojozz53jojozz53over 11 years ago
great story

great!

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
Get yourself

a proof reader since you obviously are unable to do it yourself!!

There're times when you even write 'i' instead of 'I'!!

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
ANON #1

This is a website that offers amatuer writers the chance to publish their works for the rest of us to see. If you have a critique that does not involve the grammatical errors, than by all means share. But if you cannot be bothered to write anything else, please quit leaving such reviews.

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
Anon #2

I just stumbled upon this while browsing through the public comments under the Incest category.

Anon #1 was just a damn rude person, but he had a point to make. Literotica, as the site is named, I suppose is about writing erotic materials in a literarily manner. Therefor, readers leaving comments about spelling / grammatical mistakes should not be denied or discouraged, contrary to what Anon #2 seemed to suggest.

montywingermontywingerover 11 years ago
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Come on you guys, it's an erotic story; read, enjoy and leave positive comments. If you didn't like it or the grammar mistakes write direct.

For me it was great such a shame it wasn't in time for the Summer Loving entry it would have had a good chance.

Please keep writing, you are good.

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
Sexy Story

Very hot. She's such a slutty, naughty little girl. I hope there's another chapter; and I hope she gets spanked after she asks her Daddy to spank her.

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
Good, If...

Good, if slightly formulaic - and too short.

Not sure how I would have fared reading this later in my reading session, but as the first thing I read this morning it got me maybe a third hard. I think it was all over a bit too quickly for more blood flow to occur.

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
Great!!! What's next?

This story was amazing!!! Not my all time favorite but if I had to place it, it'd be pretty high up there. This was really a memorable story for me. I hope you continue to make a sequel to this one because it was very hot!

AnonymousAnonymousover 1 year ago

SO THE SLUT USES DADDY'S CREDIT CARD.....THESE STUPID CLUELESS CUCK FATHERS ARE PATHETIC

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