by ImSoGay
This seriously is the best story I've ever read. I can't get enough of it. It's absolutely perfect! I can't wait for the next part!
I don't know if you'll add another chapter (Honestly I think it was a perfect ending as it is) but I hope you will keep writing and submitting. The pace was perfect, the flow and developement was great and you made it very believeable. I gave it a five only because I couldn't give it more.
A lovely piece of storytelling. Warm, passionate and romantic, a real love story. Very well done.
...and lovely I've ever read. I love you both just reading it. What does that say? Thank you thank you thank you.
I can relate to the ups and downs in a relationship. I'm a straight guy, but that was a very well-written story.
excellent not too long at all best story iv read in a long time could you possibly write another chapter about the wedding may be children will her mum change her mind
Written from a place of knowing well the feelings you were writing about. IMHO the story is brilliant. Thank you for sharing.
I really enjoyed this story. It was more about the characters than it was about the sex, eh? Well, I enjoyed that. I enjoyed the machismo of Frankie, the sort of faulty swagger. I was surprised by little things - like the drawing on the mantle, etc. great job.
The characters were well put together and felt real. So too did all the emotions. The buildup made the sex that much more special. Great job and thank you for sharing.
IDB.
I liked the concept of the story. I liked the emotion. I actually thought it could've been longer, the courtship was too succint for believeability. And yes, the sex was kind of boring. For a straight girl having her first lesbian encounter, I felt like it could've been sexier, more of an adventure.
The perv in me always likes more hot sex.
Want a fan of the parent situation and how short that was, and with such a definitive outcome, but it was still a good twist.
I Really Enjoyed The Story. And I See Many
Similarities To My Own Real Life.
I'm So Glad That I Had "Cum" Out To My Parents
And Sibling @ 14 yrs Old. They Accepted Me As
Their Daughter & Sister. Though 2 Years Later They
Were Taken In A Tragic Accident.
I Still Feel That They Are With Me, And Only Want
My Happiness.
I'm So Happy That Frankie, Had The Love &
Determination - Too Try & Reunite Her "Love" With
Her Father.
This was one of the best story's I've read on this site!!! I love the storyline, the emotion, the realness of this story! I also like that Frankie loves Lauryn so unconditionally and only wants Lauryn to be happy no matter what she has to do to make it that way! You've made two very real and true characters who both love wholeheartedly!!! Great job and I'm REALLY hoping that there will be a second part to this story cause this first part was absolutely amazing!!!!!
Good, but flawed in several respects.
You almost lost me right at the start. Nobody would wear that amount of diamonds out in the daytime, on their own. Maybe back in the fifties, but certainly not today.
Some of the dialogue was a tad clunky, and there were a LOT of lazy spelling mistakes, which could easily have been fixed, (saw/was , Lo/No, etc), and while this may seem harsh, bear in mind that you've made a big effort with a great story, so why then allow such niggles to annoy the reader? NEVER annoy your reader.
Overall, this was a really excellent, 5-star story, dragged down to around a 3.75 for the above points. (I'll compromise and round it up to 4)
Kim xx
Beautiful romantic story! Keep up the great writing whether you continue this tale or go for new ones!
The pesky little proofreading quirks didn't stand a chance of distracting me from the extremely touching story. The last 2 pages had tears running down my face, but I couldn't stop reading. The story was absolutely wonderful. Thank you.
Great story from start to finish. I was crying along with the characters. Love and romance is a gift that everyone should enjoy but for those of us whom don't have it, need to be able to feel it from the stories of others. Thanks!!!
Good love stories are an essential part of one's existence. Thank you for writing with the emotions you have. Loved it!!
I truly enjoyed your story! However it surprises me that you have stopped writing despite getting a stream of great reviews. Hopefully you are able to continue where you left us hanging.
Tony
This is so BEAUTIFUL!
I am sure there are lots of people who can relate to this story, I am one of them. Real Issues, real Feelings and Emotions. The part where Frankie goes to see to see Lauren's father, brought a lump to my throat. Awesome!
** I LOVED IT **
I loved it, it was just.. amazing. From the sex to the emotion... -wipes tear-
From beginning to end it was awesome . I can't say in words how good it is. One of the best love story I've ever read . Emotional and logical.
that moment when your pissed off bc it ends an theres no other part! please keep going!
Loved the story had to read it no stopping it was riveting please write more
wow!! that was fucking awesome...
i hope u continue writing... BEST love story i've ever read on literotica
please write part 2
What a great story. well written and completely believable, sexy as hell to boot. Thanks
One of the best love stories I have ever read. Thank you for writing and sharing it.
Thank you for this story. Definitely my favorite!
I laughed, I smiled, and I cried. No other story has had
this huge effect on me. I felt every feeling there was because it reflects me, yet it teaches me more about love.
Thank you and I hope to read more of your stories :)
-Priscilla Paulino
I am a very happy and confident young lesbian who has had the incredible luck to meet and eventually seduce 3 very straight, married mothers and believe me, it was an exciting adventure filled with smiles and tears. Frustration and concern. Luckily neither hurt their marriage but they seem much more grounded and comfortable. Additionally, the sex was incredible.....
You are a great writer with exceptional talent.
I can honestly saw that this story is one of the greatest ones I've ever read. You have an exceptional talent for writing and should continue writing stories.
i'm glad i stuck with this story. it was very rewarding
You're good, Gay, a decent writer and a fine story-teller. So why have you only got two stories on this site? Go on, do us all a favour and write some more.
How dare you not write a sequel!!!!!!!! Torture I tell you, torture!!!!!! I read all of this and was like, "I love it, I need to read the sequel." Then I was like, "No sequel?" :"(
I love it! Thank you so much for writing it and showing true feelings!
L
Thank you, so beautifully written & composed. Just the right depth & speed of plot, with a few little twists.
Truly excellent
The previous comment said it all. Although it's been years, please write a sequel. I'd love to read more of these two wonderful ladies as there is more to tell. Thank you so much for sharing this with us.
Doesnt what the two sexy ladies went through together they still found a way for their relationship to work. Which is what ppl on the whole need to do. It doesn't matter if the person is bi straight gay lesbian or a transexual, As long as two people really and truly love , they will do anything to be by each other side and stay there
I love romantic stories with visual description, of how they're partner coaxes there emotions out of them. I must tell this story had everything that one of those romance books has, with that added flair. Great story.
5💥's😍😍😍😍😍
You know you're reading a good story when you're talking to the characters like they're people XD Sitting on my bed like, "Lauryn, you're hella gay! Accept it and kanoodle already!"
I hope theres gonna be more to this story, you cant leave us hangin like this. I wanna know if she said yes to frankies marriage proposal, which i think she prob did, but id also like to know if lauryns mother is gonna come around like her father did. This was a great story though.
Thank you ImSoGay. This story is soooo lovely. I appreciate the character of these two characters. Frankie's desire and affection for Lauryn expressed in honest communication, patience, perseverance and willingness to sacrifice. Lauryn's response was an openness, willingness and deliberate honest consideration of the meaning and impact of an intimate relationship with Frankie. Neither treated the other with frivolity. Honesty, respect, passion, desire, forgiveness--impressed with the love and tenderness; sex within this context ...very sexy!
This story makes me jealous for a Fankie and Lauryn relationship!
What a fantastic story! This one had me running the gamut of emotions... angry, happy, sad. It even made me cry. Thank you so much for sharing it with us!
I'm So Gay, TOO! Love this story. Would love to have my own Frankie or Lauryn. Amazing writing. Thank you.
This is a beautiful love story. I'm not gay but it was a turn on for me as well as being a beautiful love story. I wonder if I am missing something in life. :-)
This is the second time I have read this story and I got more wrapped up in it the second time. The characters are so well developed they seem alive and it seems like I know them and can identify with them--I share their joy and their sorrow, their laughter and their tears. The love is palpable. This does what good writing should do--grab you by the neck and pull you in. Congratulations. Don't ever stop.
This story was very real life and two people who loved each other deeply and true and hope you will write and let us all know about the marriage and whether they have children and what becomes of the children as they grow up, fantastic storyline thank you ImSoGay. xx
Nice story, taking the time to describe the characters and their relationship. But story a bit crude (pretty basic and clunky). But what great sex scenes! Those are really something!
Sorry you haven't written any more than the 2 stories listed here. This was a well written one with 2 fleshed out characters and a creditable storyline. The ending was good but a little abrupt although was expecting it to involve her mother more. Perfect reason for another chapter. 5 from me.
Frankie was very controlling, even in very small ways (like being pissed that lauryn wasn’t in the bed the next morning - like chill). But their first time together was well written. Just wish I could like Frankie more.
Its good to read a story with realistic characters with their hurts, weaknesses and faults all on display. I like the way they face life's hurdles and overcome them rather than just being two 2 dimensional cardboard cut outs of some flawless super hero, as is too common in many stories on this site.
It is a loss to this site and its readers that you only wrote 2 excellent stories before stopping.
Very well orchestrated storey but the over arrogance of the principal character overshadowed the feel of the plot. Still interesting though
I loved reading this again. Have you just reposted this as I am sure that I voted 5* last time and there must have been earlier comments?
Did not care for main character, too selfish. Too rich. Am a fan of rich vs poor relationship dynamics or rich vs middle class but rich vs ungodly rich just leaves me pissed off at the more obnoxious one.
Frankie is a unique character: an author fantasy Mary Sue who is nevertheless entirely unpleasant, without redeeming qualities. Shallow, jumps to conclusions CONSTANTLY--her only personality traits are being rich, not listening to people she claims to care about, and liking it when bimbo with even less personality fawns all over her. Selfish and controlling.
At least Lauren is rich, too, or the power dynamics would be even more abusive.
After finishing up the tragic and heartbreaking story 'Valerie' in my back catalog this one was a fantastic respite. Thank you for that.