All Comments on 'All the Tricks were Treats'

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HornygingerHornygingerover 11 years ago
Wow

That was so hot, made me so horny & wishing to be Max

:-)

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
hot story -- I want some of that !!

This story is so hot it made me so hard that I came all over my face and ate it all up. I would love to be with 2 hot TVs (or she-males) and the way you described the bandit & the cop I could really picture them in front of me. Can't wait to have Lara Croft's big cock up my ass. Please continue this story.

kuroukiphoenyxkuroukiphoenyxover 11 years ago
oh BOY!!!!

+ Sitting on the edge of my seat* SO WHAT HAPPENS NEXT!! DON'T LEAVE ME HANGING LIKE THIS!!!!!!

TimothyMTimothyMover 11 years ago

I'm in two minds about this story. On one hand I really liked the way Max was tricked and how much he enjoyed it. On the other hand it pissed me off that Lance would just abandon his friend like that, and the story definitely became less believable with the Laura Croft finish. No way would a straight guy be so OK with what had just happened, and it would have been nice if Lance had been the guy to help Max adapt to his new orientation.

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
All the Tricks *Weren't* Treats...

Your story was well written in a grammatical sense but plotwise not so much. You pulled a bait and switch. You set up a scenario were your reader expected & the story required Max & Lance to get together. You foreshadowed and set up that event with the costume, the cock ring, the silk thong, the pill, Lance telling him how to walk, kissing him... for Lance to then just disappear and go off with Rusty is the biggest, worst let down ever! Lance was the trick your reader wanted as a treat... And you completely let that go to have Max have some completely unbelievable encounter with not one but 2 she-males, who apparently cum straight-male transforming vemon. It was a let down. Had the two females taken Max into a room and gotten him all worked up and handcuffed down only to have *Lance* come in and torment him... and take him... and fuck him until he came all over himself while the two chicks (whether one or both was a TV or a She-male is immaterial) joined in - now that would've an "all the tricks were treats" scenario. This just fell short. It went from being a very believable story to being an unbelievable story because of your "twist," which is generally how you can tell when such a device works or not. In this case... not.

NH_SissyGuyNH_SissyGuyover 11 years ago
Great Story!

I REALLY liked this story, but it really was in the wrong category. Still a great read and it was well written. And it was good to see someone pay attention to their grammar and spelling. Keep at it.

ezsmilesezsmilesover 11 years ago
me too

I agree. Thanks.

burnie4434burnie4434over 10 years ago

Just another guy finding that he likes cockd and cum lol

Mr. BriggsMr. Briggsover 9 years ago
WOW WOW WOW WOW

One of the best stories I've read. The cock surprise was the best I've experienced in a story. THANKS!!!

schaeffschaeffover 9 years ago
Great Hot Fantasy

Hot. I liked it. All of it. It allowed me to secretly fantasize being any of those lusty characters. The rod hardener was sharing the fantasy of going to a put-it-out-in-the-open party where bulges on display are acceptable, admired and enjoyed. Also, an erotic plot twist of an anticipated hetero-sex encounter being replaced with an unexpected homo experience is more like the random way things actually happen in real life. Well written. My own erect bulge became apparent when the main character, Max, drew me in to his world, by willingly submitting to the double she-male skewer instead of fighting it. I don't know about you, but this story had a five star stiffening effect. Hot.

Leo971Leo971almost 8 years ago
Surprise!

I really enjoyed it unlike another reader. I don't think Max would have been ready to go straight for gay sex with his friend Lance. Two hot chicks wanting to fuck him only to find out they have nice big cocks! What is he suppose to do but relish it and take it all literally. I don't like the fact that Rusty ended back up in Lance's arms but it's your story and I think you can go much further with this story. I like the twist and turns I don't want to know what is going to happen otherwise what is point of reading it. Not believable? I think it is very believable I want to read what you have in store for us;) Now I’m going to limber up and suck my cock until I empty a hot load in my mouth!

vsloverbicdvsloverbicdover 7 years ago
More pleasurable teasing

After reading 'Her Presents,' i put on my VS satin string bikinis and stroked myself for another half an hour reading about lucky Max. Thanks for the wonderful imagery!

subrbnchgobttmsubrbnchgobttmover 3 years ago

Another straight white boi converted in a BBC lover

smoothed273smoothed273almost 3 years ago

Very Hot ! I hope there`s a Part 2 in the future.

smoothed273smoothed273about 1 year ago

👍👍💖💖💖💖💋💋💋💋💋💋✌

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