All Comments on 'Two Old Friends'

by Baldguy72

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AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
Short

And to the point

Nicely done

ED

Baldguy72Baldguy72over 11 years agoAuthor
Thanks

Thanks Ed. Had some help from a friend ;-)

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
Not

really romantic at all. Was she still married? If so, then she was just a cheating slut of a wife.

lesliejoneslesliejonesover 11 years ago
Nice quick tale

I enjoyed what was a nice quick, but well-told tale. Don't let the moralizers get to you--I can't imagine why anyone hung up on such matters even bothers to frequent this site.

Baldguy72Baldguy72over 11 years agoAuthor
Thanks

Thanks!

Kat0511Kat0511over 11 years ago
A really good start

It takes courage to submit something here and you're off to a really good start. Your story flows logically and keeps it simple. I'd like to see more detail in your future submissions. Keep at it.

dtyolmndtyolmnover 11 years ago
Great story

Really good. Hope you follow up with part2 and fill in some of the blanks. Still married? etc.

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago

It was a good story, but belonged more in Erotic Couplings, not Romance. As far as a Romance story went, it felt sort of...empty. Like something was missing. The talent is there, really! You just have to breathe more life into the story, make the dialogue a little less stale, and just give it some more character. 7/10

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