by Baldguy72
really romantic at all. Was she still married? If so, then she was just a cheating slut of a wife.
I enjoyed what was a nice quick, but well-told tale. Don't let the moralizers get to you--I can't imagine why anyone hung up on such matters even bothers to frequent this site.
It takes courage to submit something here and you're off to a really good start. Your story flows logically and keeps it simple. I'd like to see more detail in your future submissions. Keep at it.
Really good. Hope you follow up with part2 and fill in some of the blanks. Still married? etc.
It was a good story, but belonged more in Erotic Couplings, not Romance. As far as a Romance story went, it felt sort of...empty. Like something was missing. The talent is there, really! You just have to breathe more life into the story, make the dialogue a little less stale, and just give it some more character. 7/10