the slapping of the waves upon the shore bathed in the moons rays. TK U MLJ LV NV
i think you are new;
sonically this is nice, be careful with it, poets tend to see it as a cheap effect, -ly. -ing
The promie of a touch so beautiful
Keenly lay dying
Pounding of waves echoes free in the hollows
Left alone softly crying
promie doesn't seem to fit in with the overall tone
be careful with it: although i admit i like
singing softly fathomless
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