A nice story, if a little short and hurried. You write well - but please look up the uses of 'to lie' and 'to lay'; I know it's something of a lost cause, but it still matters to some of us!
So good, just the sweet scene of her masturbating for him and the control he has over her.. more than a little turned on and desperate for part 2. Can you spare time for the next short instalment?
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short but good
very good but much to short
I want more, an excellent start
What can I say, I'm an erotic literature tease. Maybe I'll write a longer story some day...
Short and sweet
A nice story, if a little short and hurried. You write well - but please look up the uses of 'to lie' and 'to lay'; I know it's something of a lost cause, but it still matters to some of us!
Thank you for sharing your talent with us.
Nice first effort...
I like the short ones as well as the longer ones...but sometimes the quick fix is just what I need! Thanks -- hcl
So good, just the sweet scene of her masturbating for him and the control he has over her.. more than a little turned on and desperate for part 2. Can you spare time for the next short instalment?
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