All Comments on 'The Firmament Laughs'

But Oh, what an entrance.

Beautiful and well executed - and oh, that last line, taking the bite awaay a bit. GReat!

The mocking tone and obscure imagery keeps the reader at a distance which I find off-putting. It is a little funny that the narrator gets run over while gazing up romantically at the sky. Wonderful sonics. Loved 'delicate marshy tones,' but aside from comic relief, what do I take from this? That love is shit? That romance is worth nothing? That fancy talk thee and firmament make me think you're full of shit. Still, worth mentioning.

Does a bere shit in the woulds?...5ed easy

Glad I saved this for last

just riffin on Baudelaire and Dante. i could go for the easy reaches, ya know,

on the sky-road thru purgatory, TK U MLJ LV NV

I'm completely lost here. Not sufficiently edu-ma-cated to grasp at much of this, other than the first lines. When you resurface (hopefully not from within the firmament) I would be interested in some kind of elucidation of intent/references.

You discussed this in a thread somewhere, can't find it yet. Shalom.