All Comments on 'Heaven's Hellion Ch. 01'

Maybe a few more words in future chapters might help.

Pretty powerful for a first chapter and if you could try and make it longer before you post a tip you dont want the whole story to be fast pace gonna wanna slow down at parts and give gaps between the exciting parts or the story goes way to fast

Like the others, i think its a good story, nice hook...im eagerly awaiting chapter 2. Tho try to make it a bit longer? Maybe 2-3 pages a chapter? So it goes along at a decent pace

need to make the story longer or people wont get into to. im not coming back for a second chapter.