This has quite put me in the mood for a wee bit of tea & a few bites of a tasty strumpet. Seriously though, there's a weird innocence innate in both the characters that's incongruous with their actions . This is too short but what's here is well done & loads different from the usual tripe.
"My dressing gown opened below it's tie displaying my erect cock ..." - when you have an 'inverted comma' it is indicating a missing letter. Thus, 'it's' is showing a letter missing between the 't' and the 's', as in 'it is'. OK, now put that in place where you put 'it's'! Does it make sense? - "My dressing gown opened below it is tie displaying my erect cock ..."?
It doesn't, does it? On the other hand, 'its' is showing possesive - as in 'the tie belonging to my dressing gown'. "My dressing gown opened below its tie displaying my erect cock ..." .
Ever read a "Mills and Boon"? There is no 'e' on the end of 'Boon'!
And so on ...
really didn't want the parents getting involved, at least not for some time...
Another LAZY author who uses apostrophe's instead of quotation marks for dialog. Pure laziness. Don't give the bullshit of that's the way we do it in the UK. It's laziness.
Great story, more please
You jackoff's! This is an amature story site,
you're real beef is actually the grammer? You
sorry sacks of a-hole shit! ROTFLMFAO! Seriously?
Seriously? I thought I had so little a life that
I myself tend to frequent this site quite a bit more
than any normal guy should, but you two just
take the taco! OH-HOHOHOHAHAHA SHIT! You guys suck...
oh my side, that's great lol... oh and to the author, good
job yo, nice...it was nice...
Yea I take comments seriously from Anonymous posters. Yea right!!!! I think the stories are pretty good considering it is from a first timer.
Great story, I can hardly wait for more of it, please post more soon
I can't believe how anal some of these people are about grammar mistakes. This is a sex site not an English study class. Get a life. A great story, please continue.
Please listen to people that comment and ARE members from this site.
There are too many people that will not leave a name but are quick to
comment. You are doing a good job with the story and build up was good.
After reading part 1-you needed some background on why the father reacted
the way he did and mother was clueless due to deafness. Sometimes when
comments are made, the confidence of writing can be affected. Listen to what
the members say and not ones who aren't. Really like your series-keep going!
Please post more chapters.
Please continue this.
Oh god what's going to happen now moreeeeeeee
H O T, need to know the next chapter
Please, when might we expect the remaining chapters of this story? I will forgive the grammatical errors for the rest.
Pleeease continue writing! Looking forward to your next awesome chapter...
you will ignore all the fake rave reviews and listen only to the complaints, that is the only way you will ever improve. all those kiss ass members do writers no favors by giving rave reviews on subpar stories if they gave HONEST reviews writers would either improve or go away making the site a lot better than it is now.
So, is Rexie going to leave this hanging? Regardless of the small errors, this is a good story, and deserves to be told in its entirety. I hope we will still learn what dad did, and whether Tim and Stacy were able to finally, fully realize their love. Let's have more!
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