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Amber and Jack Ch. 01

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by irishkenny197411/11/12

Enjoyed it.

The dialogue was a little mawkish in places, but overall very hot! Would certainly like to see this continue. Perhaps with the wife included? Or maybe take it down a BDSM path? :-)

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by Anonymous11/11/12

yes, more please!

I would love it if they did it again and she got pregnant.

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by knotthd4411/11/12

Great start to a very hot series of hot adventures for these two. Keep up the good work.

Great start I think to some very hot sexual adventures for these two.
Keep up the good work!

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by Anonymous11/11/12

Great start

Love to see her become his little sex toy.

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by Vikingboy11/11/12

Irishkenny has it right

Let the wife "discover" them, and let her and Jack take care of Amber. Some nice three-way with a little bondage and spanking added in.

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by britbrit110311/11/12

More please!

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by Anonymous11/11/12

So hot!

Loved this. Would love to read more and more of their fucking adventures!

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by Anonymous11/11/12

HOTTTT

Very hot, very delicious....Jack will likely have a lively imagination and will inspire Amber's as well....well written

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by praetorian2311/11/12

Very well done !!!!!!

Keep it comming, so to speak!!! Great so far....

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by Anonymous11/11/12

Parts of this story were very good, parts needed more polish, but a very worthwhile read. Forget everyone's ideas for the story line and stay with your own; you seem to be on the right track. But, seriously, whoa back on the use of "smirk." Way, way too much smirking going on. It's a word with a smug connotation, no matter it's broader application. My own preference would be moan, rather than grunt -- just seems more like pleasure, less like taking a dump. Please understand my critical comments are offered in the kindest way possible, and not as a personal offence. Anyone who writes a yarn is worth about 20 times more than a donkey ass critic.

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Look forward to reading more

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by Anonymous11/11/12

emergency brake

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by Anonymous11/12/12

GREAT START

yes, you're a good writer make a series about these 2 or maybe add Mrs. Callahan

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by mghopper11/12/12

more please

Great start please continue the story, I loved it.

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by masterslave0011/12/12

Good...

Good first attempt. Continue, I will be coming back...

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by Outsider50511/12/12

Great work

Great story! Will be waiting for the next chapter

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by Anonymous11/12/12

Yes!

More please! Got me hot in seconds - more!

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by tazz31711/13/12

DO YOU NEED ANOTHER RIDE

call me and I will cum to you. TK U MLJ LV NV

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by Anonymous11/13/12

More, please

Your story develops well, but could be improved by proofreading. Spellcheck will not catch the use of improper pronouns, which tends to confuse your reader.

Example:
"He quickly pulled his cock out of her tight pussy before slamming back into him"

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by Anonymous11/13/12

More More More

What a hot little babysitter! I want to see more of them. She's such a naughty little girl! Maybe his wife catches them. Wow. There are many ways you can go with this storyline.

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by Nemesis106611/14/12

Really enjoyed the first installment, so there has to be more. Thanks

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by Joe_Roberts11/17/12

more please

include in the next writing if Amber is on the pill or not... and how fertile she is if she isn't on the pill...

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by Anonymous11/17/12

love this story! please write more.

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by Anonymous11/28/12

More Please

Please continue. Very good so far...

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by Anonymous11/28/12

Crap

Just plain rubbish why was she letting him Rubbish

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by Anonymous12/16/12

Wow

You got me so wet, the foreplay a the beginning, Jack's orgasm description... I couldn't stop touching myself.
I'll stay posted, thanks!

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by Anonymous12/19/12

More!!

Loved it and lQQk forward to further adventures with Amber. She sounds so refereshing and in Need of further guidance and hands on experience. If she needs help l will be more than happy to help;o) Joe

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by William smyth01/23/13

Joining the majority

Adding one more compliment for this writer.
I read her second story today and liked it so well I logged on to this one and found it every bit as good. Both of them 5 star!
So by all means use those ideas you have twirling around in your head and give us more of this real good honest porn.

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by MRShea01/23/13

Anticipation...

Yes the sitter and the dad is a bit taboo, YET, the anticipation of what was to cum was done very beautifully. I really enjoyed it. GREAT JOB!

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by Anonymous02/13/13

Amber and Jack....

Definately continue this series please, very hot indeed!! I love to read stories of cheating husbands ( turns me on soooooooooo much ), so feel free to submit many more. Thanks for a great read.
Great job!!

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by horny819198802/13/13

Next Chapter

If anyone is interested... The next chapter of the story has been posted. It's under the "Erotic Coupling" section. It's titled Amber and Jack Ch. 02

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