"Fine...maybe I'll find a stable buck right now"
And when pray tell can we expect the next installment?
This chapter broke my heart!!!! I can't believe all the things he said and did to her. You're right "This Love(Will Be Your Downfall)" is the perfect song for them. I seriously can't wait for the next chapter!!!!
After I finished this chapter I was so angry at him. I could not stop thinking about it. You are a really good writer. The words just flow when I am reading and can't wait to see what the next sentence brings. Lookin forward to the next chapter.
I'm really anxious for the next chapter to come out soon. I'm scared to see what could happen next, though.
Malik bringing back3 whores was totally unexpected! Can't wait for the next chapter to see what Brynna will do that " could save her, even if it brought her to her death".
"And sometimes you didn't want to know the end. Because how could the end be happy? How could the world go back to the way it was when so much bad had happened?" (LotR Two Towers) This chapter is heart breaking. The end throws everything into chaos, because how can this possibly end well when he has sunk so unbelievably low. But it is the mark of truly good writing when an author can make you loathe a character so deeply and yet still have you burning to find out what happens next! Absolutely horrible! And by that I mean completely amazing, well done! ^_^
& I haven't even read it yet. I'm literally that happy to log in on Saturday morning & find chapter 6 ready & waiting (after many days of checking multi times a day...) happy happy joy joy!!! I'm off to run Saturday errands, & mentally savor that ch 6 is waiting for me to read tonight.
because I can't say it any better but wanted you to know that if I had been able to, I would have. Excellent!
This was great! I cant wait to see what she does next. And im a little curious about this Saul charcter. Is he young like her? And is he attracted to her because that would be an interesting twist. And after what Malik did to her it would definitely be an interesting twist for her to fall for someone else or at least seek some comfort or compainionship. But a great chapter in all.
It was a great chapter, even though it made me want to strangle Malik in front of his three whores. He is undoubtedly feeling hurt as well, and he's lashing out at her in his pain, but he really needs to learn to think before he acts. What he did is disgusting, abominable, and I feel bad for Brynna. Still... must read more!
P.S. To all those wondering, the thing that could save her, even if it might mean the death of her, is a horse... so she can escape. At least that's what I pieced together. We'll find out (hopefully) soon!
This was great!!! I can't wait for the new chapter!!! Please hurry!!!
NEXT CHAPTER NOW! I'M DYING! PHYSICALLY DYING!
Wow! Just wow! This chapter was amazing! And very unexpected!
Gosh the last part was crushing to read through. It was like I could feel her devstation. What he did to her was totally unforgivable and I hope he has to work his butt off to get it back. But what I really want to know is what Malik is feeling about her rejection and him raping her. (Totally made me want to punch him in his man parts btw) He must not be that unfeeling to actually enjoy causing her pain with harsh words and the 3 slut wh****. I want to feel his pain of what he is going through, to feel his anguish of wanting to possss her totally and completely. Body foremost, mind obviously, and soul all encompassingly.
Please it would be lovely to hear from his POV. I want to know what is going through his head with what just happen. Of course he's not going to go after her, he's to foolish for that. More than likely though he is probably thinking that all she is doing is out of obligation. Hense his behavior towards her. He is totally a bad Dom in my book...but i keep hoping that he'll get better. I don't see that in the near future. And more than likely she is about to do something rash like running into the stables and taking his devilish stallion for a ride or going to her garden and choking down some herbs that'll make the pain go away. (Both foolish and the latter would more cruelty from the master) But result will be the same, her getting hurt leaving him feeling guilty and ready to beg for forgiveness to his dying day. I would like that alot, enjoy it actually.
This is just my thought about Doms...in order to receive such a precious gift as total submission one must be willing to give basically everything. Meaning if I'm willing to give you the keys to make soul, free will, love, my whole being then I want , LOVE!, protection, happiness, safety, and your dominance back whole heartily in return. As subs we give the most. And in giving we have the most to lose. Doms its a gift.
I love this story and can't wait to see what gut wrenching twist you give us next.
First off let me say I was super excited to see this updated! This chapter had me cringing the whole time, and Malik ugh I wanted to kill him! After he acted like an animal in the rape scene I thought he was going to almost crawl back to her but he went the complete opposite direction! I have no idea how his character can even begin to redeem himself! I hope she leaves, on a horse maybe? And so he gets his act together! Can't wait for the next one!
Again your writing amazes me, you have taken it a completely original direction ooh I hate him! I hope she leaves, I hope he suffers! Fantastic, wonderful what more can be said? The wait for the next chapter will kill me! Thank you.
That was truly a twist in the story line . I hope it all comes together at the end with a happy resolution . Hurry and write the next chapter . Please let us know when you will be posting it .
Please post next chapter soon!!!
God, I had hope but now I hate him, I hope he suffers loosing her!!!!! Let him suffer for being an utter bastard.
"This love will be your downfall"
I got too attached to our main gal; I started crying for her at the end. He's being a prick and so may other words that aren't even harsh enough. At this point I'm not sure if I want them to get back together, or for her to run away. I'm leaning more towards her making a run for it. You took me through an emotional roller coaster in this chapter and I loved every second of it. Cannot wait to read the next one!!
I couldn't even think of a different title. No matter how much of a raging asshole he was throughout the story, I always loved and admired him as a dom, but now I can't even begin to express the anger I felt towards him that last bit, especially since I was falling so in love with him at the beginning of this chapter. Maybe I hate him so incredibly much because I had a character do something similar to another in one of my pieces and I temporarily hated him, as well.
Oh, well. I'll just have to sit in my angst and wait for the next chapter. I still love everything about you and your writing, though... Just please, please hurry before we all eat ourselves alive over what will happen next.
My heart is pounding right now! Poor Brynna!! Malik is so heart-breakingly cruel. I know I'm being greedy, but please post the last chapter soon. I don't think I've ever felt as anxious and invested in a story as I am in this one. Thank you for your continued fabulous writing!
Your writing in this chapter seemed to have come from somewhere deeper. As I was reading it, I though how markedly different your writing is on this story and this chapter, than it was for Claiming and Alley.
This chapter... Just blows me away. Love how you have every single reader gasping today. All I can say is it's a damn good thing we're not all in the same room... Though wouldn't that be a sight?
Ellie Goulding line was this love will be your downfall!!
Amazing chapter!!! Malik is fucking pissing me off!!!
I never ever comment on here. I read stories all the time and it is the first time I've felt compelled to write because this story is freaking AMAZING!!! Omg - that ending! Totally unexpected and I HATE Malik right now - my heart is breaking for Brynna. You are a phenomenal writer and waiting for the next chapter is going to be absolute torture!!!
I got so angry when I read the last part. I really think Brynna should make Malik jealous by flirting with Saul and Brom. She needs to run away from that asshole so he realizes what he's missing! I was surprised by the twist ending, and very pissed at Malik.
But no mortal man will EVER take a solid kick in the nuts, and instantly proceed to get up, outrun, get an erection and rape a terrified woman. I'm guessing this is a nod to the author being female, because that scene made absolutely no sense to any man who has ever lived. To put it in somewhat comparative terms, it's like a woman suffering from the pain of childbirth getting up, running and getting aroused in very short order.
Minor complaint. Liking the story, mostly. Still waiting for you to introduce a romantic alternative to Malik though, please please PLEASE. He fucking sucks at being a human being, is nastier than Jenner, and a close second to Lachlan. Malik's shown almost no likable personality qualities, with all the things she praised him for being the kind of traits normal men possess. Nothing he's done so far can't be replicated by other, and better men. GIve her a real man to master and be mastered by, please, not this shadow of a thing that comes across like Bram Stoker's Dracula.
Did an idiot really just compare a kick to the nuts to child birth? Let me shove a watermelon up your arse, and then we'll see if getting kicked in the nuts is so bad.
Again, amazing story, CANNOT wait for the next chapter, please, please hurry!
Wow! I can’t believe Malik…he’s such a dick. He rapes her and then throws her away....I hope Brynna gets on that horse and leaves him. “Little more than a cloying, warm hole to cum inside”—I could kill him. It sucks because I want them to end up together but now I hate Malik! He needs to beg and grovel for forgiveness, tell her his true feelings, and propose.
Great job titania123! Your writing is amazing. You're really great at portraying the emotions of the characters. I got all emotional at the ending LOL. It would be great to find out when Malik first saw Brynna and how he felt. Keep up the good work!
This chapter left me on edge. I hope there is more to come and soon. Great job!
I'm telling you right now, don't you DARE abandon this story!! Wow, I'm so, so, so, in love with this story! I wonder what the heck is she going to do. I kinda felt their was a big heartbreak on the horizon, he acts so damn cold towards her. Why is he like that? I mean he did go to all that trouble to get her there, so why act so mean? Please tell me you have the next chapter submitted and ready to go.......I really have to see where this is going next!
you are officially a favorite author, and this is my favorite story, I gave you five stars and would have given more if it was possible. Thanks so much Titania123!
I actually made an account just so I could vote for your stories in this series and add you as a favourite author! This series is beyond excellent! It's gripping, and moving and just so wonderfully written.
Cannot wait for the next chapter! Please don't take too long! I can't wait to read what happens next!
An amazing story!
I'm almost lost for words, what a great chapter. I really want Bryanna to escape Malik so he can realize what he's actually done.
I'd also like to say thank you for your consistency and communication towards your fans on this site. Your one of the most reliable authors on this site, even if we have to wait a long time for a chapter we can always count on you telling us instead of losing hope that the story will ever be finished (like many authors on this site).
Please, please, please, PLEASE post up the seventh chapter soon.. I could hardly wait for this one to come out and you do THAT to me... Seriously, I'm literally aching along with her. And I couldn't pick up on the line.. maybe I'd re-read it.. But I'm not familiar with ALL of Ellie's songs... LOVE your style and the way it's progressing.. Just.. HURRY! (Though not so much if it's gonna mess up the story >.
why does brynna have to pay? it must have been pretty bad if he gave the impression that he was willing to give up his entire fortune to "make her pay". Now you really have to get chapter 7 up soon!
To me, a great story is a story that can create fluttering feeling in my heart throughout the story. And you DID it !! It's simply the best. Hope I can read the next chapter soon. I do believe in love, everybody!
I want to slap Malik in the face!!!! How dare he! I want to know what the history is behind his obsession so we know why she "needs to pay" and why she means that much to him
This story improves exponentially every chapter. I have to say that at first, it wasn't what I expected, too much work up & description when I was looking for something lighter at the time. However, it got me intrigued and making me come back for more.
Brynna is a very strong character, who I really like. She doesn't fall blindly in what Malik represents. She fights, she thinks, she realizes... To me she is a true heroine, not paining with prudish morals but thinking about a true regard for self.
Funny though, Malik is like a whole world of contrasts and conflicting feelings. Sometimes you love him, sometimes you just want to slap him, most of the time it's just lust. He is a really bad guy and at the same time there seems to be hints of something deeper, profounder, something that we haven't had yet the chance to meet or unravel. He is devilish, but somehow it's hard to see him evil.
Of course, we will just have to wait for the next chapter to know whether he will redeem himself or just fall to the flames.
Thank you titania123! What a treat!
I've been waiting, checking and hoping for this chapters release and I have to say it was worth it. There's something so genuinely malicious in Malik that makes him so easy to hate, that you're almost conflicted by those shreds of humanity. It's really remarkable and I can't wait to see what's in store.
I love this series and this chapter! And I'm so happy you're an Ellie goulding fan. The line was "This love will be your downfall' Which is actually my favorite song by her
I can't help thinking that 3 chicks in his bed was not as bad as if had been one chick. If she had come in to find him making love to some beautiful woman who appeared to be special to him, I think it would have hurt worse than seeing him with 3 whores.
Still, if he is ever to earn her back he has a hard road ahead.
Great chapter. Will the next chapter wrap it up or is there more?
How old is Malik anyway? Did I miss that somewhere? He's extremely scheming and secure to be able to set up Brynna (or her father) as early as 5 years ago. Also, what could a 16 year old do to a "lord" that would lead to such an obsession? Perhaps he's one of the suitors his father rejected or Brynna dismissed him because he was in love with Jacob. I hope there will be more information regarding Malik's background in future chapters. I appreciated a glimpse of Malik's youth through Eleanor. Well, I love speculating as it let me pass the time while I wait for the next chapter.
I love your work. This story is very engaging and affective. I would consider this as one of the more intelligent writing I have read both for free and paid for. I guess this is the result of writing down notes before actually writing something. Please let us know if you do decide to be published. I'd pay twice for you work compared to some of the crap I ended up buying out there. (Just don't do the $2.99 per chapter that's going on right now). Thank you for sharing your talent.
I'm a little torn with where this is going. Malik's turned into a total D-bag. Up till this chapter I "got" him. The three whores & his attitude are a bit much at this point. But I'm captivated & will continue to read. Don't think I can be swayed back to thinking Malik's not a asshat though.
I've read both your other stories, "A Simple Persuasion" and "Claiming an Ally." While I enjoyed them both and while it is certainly apparent through these earlier works that you have a knack for writing erotica and exploring the complicated nature of attraction, lust, and love, it really is this latest work that demonstrates a stunning mastery of character development and story-telling.
You create protagonists that are capable, intelligent, independent-minded women whose self-worth seems (at least initially) heavily invested in these traits. When such a woman, like Brynna, encounters a dominating yet alluring man, like Malik, she is challenged to reconcile her fiercely independent nature with the growing desire planted by his demands. This desire which I refer to is not only of a sexual nature, which is a theme that pretty much embodies this "nonconsent/reluctance" genre, but also the desire to give love, a much deeper and more toiling emotion. It is accepting this latter desire which is the most shattering to sense of self.
After all, in the context of real and typical life, we all know that loving someone and building a relationship with them means learning to compromise and making room for them in one's life, A loving partnership often involves choosing to be selfless for another over being selfish for oneself. In love, we inevitably lose independence and take the risk of tying our happiness to and placing our emotions in someone else.
In the context of your story, Brynna has chosen a life as a slave to a cold, lustful master in order to save her father. This seemingly simple and superficially smutty plot setting has developed into a rich and complex story which explores the complexity of this reconciliation of treasured independence and yielding not "to" but "for" another. Along the lines of this theme, Brynna is not the only one who is struggling. In fact, she is pretty "normal" compared to Malik. She is honest with herself, a trait of emotional stability and maturity. She recognizes that she loves (loved?) this man and acknowledges the pain she feels when she sees him with other women. Personally, I do somewhat question the depth of this "love." Is it just a chemical response to some skilled sexing? Would she be so reluctant to yield to Malik if she actually saw something in him that proves deserving of her love? Indeed, she openly declares to Malik the contrast between her body's lustful response to him and her mind's spiteful feelings for him.
On the other hand, Malik is clearly one fucked up guy. In this most recent chapter, his obsession with Brynna is revealed to be much deeper and longer lived than we first knew. Throughout the story, his attempts to "possess her" fail time and time again as he enforces iron-clad control over his her. It is only when he shows moments of vulnerability that Brynna begins to be willing to "be his." However, his constant demand for her to yield "to" him rather than allowing her to yield "for" him drives her yet further away in this most recent installment. He expresses his frustration through fury and subsequent rape. I wonder what he feels when he looks down on her slumped form after he violates her. Does he know that he has pushed her further out of reach? Does he realize that even when he did make her moan underneath him that physical response can never truly replicate the higher level of submission he desires from her? Will he come to the conclusion that this "submission" he desires from her is in fact simply wanting her to love him?
Instead of showing any sign of vulnerability or regret, he simply disappears and reappears with three naked women. It is hard to believe that after years of obsessing over Brynna, he feels nothing when he fails to get what he wants with her. I conjecture that it is insecurity that makes Malik so domineering. He is clearly drawn to Brynna, but wants to control her completely because relinquishing total control means making himself vulnerable. Because of this insecurity, he is currently incapable of love, only of obsession, unwilling to give any part of himself to her despite demanding everything from her. It is Malik's insecurity that drives him to avoid confronting his own feelings about Brynna and what he has done to her. And like every insecure person that we have ever encountered in real life, he childishly plays the "I-don't-give-a-fuck-that-I-might-have-screwed-up-b ecause-I-can-get-other-people-to-sleep-with-me" card. His actions are rash and petty. For this story line's sake, I really hope Malik deals with his heavily repressed issues and develops some sense of emotional maturity. After all, what kind of happy ending could involve a man who is too insecure to truly love?
In this nonconsent/reluctance setting, you have unearthed the very difficulties that make loving so difficult and often tragic. Few of us in our daily lives will ever be a slave to some handsome old guy in a castle, but we can all relate to the delicate balance between self-preservation and the rewards of a loving relationship.
Like your many, many other fans out there, I cannot wait until the next installment!
Titania, words fail me when I try to describe what a phenomenal writer you are and how wonderful this story is. Yesterday, I had to go back and re-read "Possess Me" from Chapter 1 and I picked up so much more, some subtle nuances and emotions I missed in my first reading.
To me, that is the work of a literary genius.
My heart is in my throat over Brynna's situation and her emotional devastation. I want to hate Malik, and I do, but part of me wants him to redeem himself and I am hoping that he does.
Please don't leave your readers waiting for too long for the next chapter in this story. I am also enamored with your Lachlan story and hope that you finish that one, it is gripping.
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