All Comments on 'Overtime'

Not bad stroke, but the dialog was, shall we say, hackneyed. "I want you to take my virginity." Well, maybe, but that seems to be about the only thing virgins on Literotica ever say. And the guy always eats them first. The author did skip the almost mandatory blowjob.

And they always want the guy to come inside them. And they always have an orgasm.

The hottest stories are the ones that have some resemblance to a possible reality - concerns about pregnancy, STDs, what will they do tomorrow when they have to work in the same office? Not that people don't ignore such problems - but the hottest stories - the seductions where the guy overcomes the girl's reservations - are by far the best

I have to agree with H.H.Morant. As a former virgin, taken by a slightly older man, I did not O my first time. I barely even knew we did anything, it was so fast. I did not get eaten out, nor fingered. These stories, while I enjoy several of them, lack realism. Not one girl I have read about says, 'wait do you have protection? I might get pregnant'

Thanks for the comments. This was my first take, and I'll keep both of your comments in mind for future submissions.