by matthewair56
Kudos for having a main character who isn't unrealistic in physical appearance. The descrpition of her pleasure wasn't bad.
Perhaps the phrase "lost her shit" is out of place in an anal sex story, unless you really mean to indicate the character defecated -- and even then...
Also, the atmospheric phenomena is "lightning" not "lightening." You meant something had "dawned" on her, not "donned" on her. A proofreader would help, spellcheck is not enough!
a picture pained in words. Just wish it continued longer.