by Butterflies512
Written reasonably well, but still a cuckolding story and hence a "1."
Too short and not character development. Three times as long would have helped.
This isn't romance. If they have "fallen in love" then they need to get a divorce and be together. Not screw around and then "have my baby" crap. And with little character development I, as a reader, can't see either character as anything but selfish.
It's very brevity, urgency and lack of character 'build' is a virtue. They're there. They can. They want to. They do. Simple. Life can be simple, y'know....Thanks!
TRY LOVIN G WIVES. two cheating sluts. a wimp and a skank. dump them naked in the snow 40 miles from ANYWHERE. 1*