Oh Malik, what gave you done?!?
I will be waiting with abaited breath for the next installment!
fantastic story, just a fantastic story titania, please write faster! LOL
I so needed that chapter just the way you wrote it. I needed to see into Malik, see what drove him, see that he had feelings, compassion and guilt. You write this story so beautifully and although it still left questions,(which is a good thing) I came away from it feeling hopeful that the two can find happiness. There is most likely going to be struggles trying to deal with his guilt and control issues, and that would be most enjoyable to read. I have been checking twice a day for this chapter because I was so heartbroken after what he did to her. He has a lot of making up to do but Brynna so deserves it. (( Her catching a fever might be a nice touch, it would show even more of a caring, gentle side of Malik.)) Just throwing that out there. :) You've created such emotions in me throughout this story...anger, hope, surprise, hatred, pity, shock. I am so, so glad you gave us Malik's perspective because the story really needed that!! You made him human and not the monster he was last chapter. I can't tell you how nice it is that you keep us updated. I really would consider getting published although we would definitely miss you here. You are very talented This has most definitely been one of my favorite stories on here!! Please keep writing, we all look forward to the next chapter!!
My comment above shout have said "have" not gave. Oh, and Malik is a total ass. He's a childish, spoiled brat. He was overwhelmed with an obsession to punish her because she dared to call him out for his churlish behavior to a village youth?!? Seems like 5 years of plotting was extreme, especially since he had not also had any desire for her at that time. Eleanor's comments about him as a youth make more sense but he just comes across as a total spoiled brat...not sure he can ever redeem himself. He's too proud and obnoxious. What caused his character to be so full of disdain? And he's now frustrated that she's broken? Ugh! That's what he wanted and set out to do...to crush her indomitable spirit! He's an ass! And to top it off, he's going to release any servant that calls him out for his horrendous behavior? He has a long way to go to have any hope for redeeming qualities! He is the one that is broken! Brynna can do soooo much better! Oh, and I created a userid so I could add this second comment. Thank you for writing stimulating text!!! It's all about drawing a visceral reaction and you do that in spades from your readers!
You can't just leave it THERE! Grrrr -.- I mean we're practically no where since the last chapter >.< just the morning after.. that aaand we gotta wait at least another 2 WEEKS? Amazing.. as always.. but LORD!
Excellant ! You managed to evoke our sympathy to a character that was not likable at all, then persuade your readers to wish for Malik to reach/save her and make amends(that was amazing) . You are such a talent. Please hurry with the next chapter, this one was incredible . Your fans are waiting !!!!
WOW! Again this chapter has taken the story away from the predictable path. I love it! The flashback scenes were very well written and I followed them fine, in fact I would say setting them in his current thought process was ingenious as it really gave depth to his character and showed the fire within whilst at the same time fleshing out all those pesky details we have been after. He has been such a swine he deserves all the guilt he is suffering and I really don't know how you will get them past what has happened. I hope that Bryanna stays strong, being so broken and numb, I hope she finds a spark of her anger at some point (poor Bryanna) and proves his lack of control over her! I enjoyed the insight into the other members of staff and its interesting that they feel so deeply regarding Bryannas treatment. I don't have alot of time for Eleanor, although the scene was poignant, but Brom has my sympathy as he really has done nothing wrong. I can see from what you have written that there is still a ways to go, take your time (the wait will be agonising) as with all things great the wait will be worth it! Thank you for brightening up my Sunday morning.
I love the word comtumacious!
This is how riveting this story is. I am not disappointed, well done. I hope we see of Malik's past. Just how did he become so warped? What was his upbringing like that he must have complete control? Whoa what a ride Titiania.
Some people can write well, others have great imaginations, but telling a story well involves much more than just good writing and imagination. You show fearlessness in your willingness to paint characters with despicable traits.
I think in this chapter you have covered a good amount of ground in putting Malik on the path to redemption. I have to tell you that Malik dismissing Eleanor and Brom is right on character trajectory. Immediately preceding a change in behavior, we typically see a star bursting of the unwanted behavior. It has always worked before so why isn't it working now, I must do it again to be sure that that one failure wasn't an aberration. Then the behavior (in this case extreme callousness toward anyone challenging his ultimate authority) is repeated again and again at lesser intervals before it stops as the knee jerk reaction and is usually replaced with uncertainty, indecision and even inertia.
The flash back worked well, there was no confusion at all.
This chapter did indeed advance the story as it provided some much needed back ground to understand Malik. Ending this and the previous chapters on emotional cliffs, this chapter quite literally at the bottom of the cliff, shows your great talent for story telling.
I don't know if I can come up with the right words to describe how gripping this story is. I know so because parts of it make me tearful, my stomach is hurting, I feel like I know the characters and I am tense, reading it because I want to know what happens. Then I have to re-read it again, and again, to get the most out of it.
My heart is in my throat over Brynna and what she is enduring physically and emotionally in this last chapter. I am equally engaged in Malik, I know under his harsh exterior, there is a man so unexpectedly enthralled and enraptured with Brynna that he does not know what to do with himself, so he reverts to form and everything he does is wrong. I am hoping to see some redemption, before it is too late, and I hope that time has not come yet.
Titania, if you are not planning to publish or writing to publish, then avid and devoted readers like myself will be at a great loss. But, please, don't make us wait for too long for the next chapter and if you could work on the Lachlan story, too, I would be forever grateful
I love this story so much and your writing is amazing! Where can I find This Love? I'd love to read it!!!
It was such a treat to wake up for work and find this here. Just barely seeing the yellow "n" made me forget all of the disdain I felt towards Malik last update, and now I love him again, and no matter how fucked up he may be, there is still an obvious good in him.
Titania, I love you. Keep up the amazing work. Your brilliant characters and fantastic storylines keep your readers frothing at their mouths for more. Can't wait for the next update -- take your time to figure things out. We all understand and can't wait!
So perfect! Please update the next chapter soon, I died waiting for this!
I am drinking my coffee and reading your story. Definitely hook on this story! I keep checking literotica to see if the next chapter is posted and to my pleasant surprise it is posted today. Keep up the good work. You're a talented writer and one of the few writers on literotica that I would be willing to pay money to read. Let us know if you're published. My credit card is ready!
just so I can complained that this chapter should have been posted yesterday!
A little too much telling instead of showing in the section just after the flash back, but an over all very enjoyable chapter. Malik's confusion over his unhappiness after achieving his goal (Bryna's defeat) is quite believable. I'm not sure that it makes sense for the servants to be making a stand on her behalf, after tolerating so much prior mistreatment.
I can't wait for the next chapter!
Keep it up!
I don't know whether to be happy that this chapter finally appeared or incensed that it was so teasingly brief, concluding with yet another cliffhanger. You are an amazing writer. I'll be restraining myself from continuingly checking this page until a reasonable amount of time has passed ... but it won't be easy.
I will die.... The last chapter was stab in heart. If she dies, than it is a kick in the head. I still have trouble liking Malik.... I can't picture him... strangely enough....What does he look like?
It certainly doesn't make me like him any more than before - unlike Claiming An Ally, he doesn't seem to have learned anything the first time around, instead focusing on how best to destroy a charming and intelligent young woman. The only thing that has changed is the sexual dynamic, which while nice, doesn't help make him more likeable. He's got way too much growing up to do to ever offer anything like what Brynna deserves in a man, and he certainly doesn't deserve forgiveness after what he's done to those other three women. On the other hand...
Brom! He seems like such a great guy, charming and affable, and blocked from interfering by some overriding principle of fealty to one's lord. Here's the kind of guy who would fight for her, save her, maybe even show some of the better side of dominance Brynna will no doubt have come to enjoy after Malik's nastiness. He doesn't even need to break whatever oaths he's sworn.
Let him be the one to save her from the river, and walk away with her as Malik rants and raves about a loss he's gone and inflicted upon himself. Who knows, maybe Eleanor could teach him to be a real man. He has enough pretty little mind-broken pets that he doesn't learn anything from.
Fantastic story-telling so far, with great insight into the mind of a villain. Looking forward to whatever comes next for Brynna, as long as it doesn't include Malik! :)
Great chapter! I have been antsy to get Malik's POV, and it was worth the wait.The time frame is a little confusing... Malik's plan to ensnare her father spans over a few months, but then they don't see each other for 5 years?? All in all, this is important context that continues to hook the reader. This is unraveling into a wonderful and epic tale. Thanks for sharing it with us!
This is so good but I hate cliff hangers! This was a good addition to the plot for sure, but so brief and it ends at the worst possible part.
you are an amazing, amazing writer Titania. I loved this chapter so much - so nice to see Malik's perspective and admit I would love to see him really redeem himself and for him and Brynna to have a HEA!
describe how much i love this story! Also, i was seriously rooting for her to make a run for it, so i'm glad she did haha. I feel bad for Eleanor. =/ but i secretly love Malik...so many mixed emotions! (btw, i loved malik's inner conversations lol)
Take your time with the next chapter, the wait is always worth it (:
You must be kidding! I can't wait 7 days! Skip work. No sleep. Eat little. Just get writing! Seriously, this is soooo good! I am enjoying this story from several standpoints...and cannot wait for the next episode!
i can wait, but i hope not to HAVE to *Grins*
After the last chapter I LOVED this, I loved seeing what he was thinking and the way that he now has come to realise. I respect Bromm and Elanor for standing up to him! Serves the stupid man right. I'm desperate to see what happens next, waiting will be agony but I look forward to your next chapter.
PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE do not keep us waiting for long! Pretty please?
This is crazy good... I sat up ALL night last night, reading chapters 1-7... I finally went to bed at 5:30 this morning! I just couldn't stop. So looking forward to chapter 8... I feel really bad for Elanor, and for Brynna... after all Malik was horrible in what he did to her, what with those whores and how he spoke to Brynna... but still I am so looking forward to chapter 8!
perfect. I purposely held off reading since chapter 3...so tonight I've had the pleasure of chapters 3 thru 7. Your writing is captivating -- plot, action, timing, dialog, characters, language, etc -- all of everything just so spot on.
I especially liked chapter 7's excursion into Malik's thoughts and heretofore unknown history with Brynna. And the plot twist in chapter 6 was compelling and added an element of surpise and depth to the plot. Also, appreciate your personal notes to readers at the beginning...most engaging for this reader.
Well, we're waiting for the more....am sure you won't disappoint! Take care, be well and write soon...hcl
This story is so well executed, the details and setting so clearly defined . The characters personalities and the time period are so real you feel like you are watching this unfold . You are an amazing talent and should be published. I look forward to the next chapter and would love to see him rescue her and show the softer side of the love he feels . He reminds me of "The Beast " who finally found his "Belle " .
One of my favourite stories on the whole site! It just grabbed me from the beginning and hasn't let go! Keep up the fantastic writing :) Cant wait for more.
As already stated ,one of the best books on the entire site .PLEASE keep writing !
I'm dying waiting for it! Please post! I'd pay to have now~!
but I do hope they end up together. She should make him work for it; I think some begging is in order... and he should make some reparation to her father. But after some time, I hope she forgives him.
Looking forward to the next chapter.
This story, its amazing. I honestly felt heartbroken when it moved to Malik's point of view.
Have enjoyed the story greatly...very few mistakes, well written, and entertaining, plus the characters are engaging and personable...Hope you finish it! Thank you for a few hours of entertainment.
Anyone else anxiously awaiting the next chapter? I have re-read this and all of the chapters, and I find this installment especially poignant and moving. Although Malik's torment is of his own making, one cannot help but feel for him. And to read of Brynna's anguish from Malik's perspective makes my stomach hurt.
It's been a week, hopefully not too much longer to find out what happens next! I keep checking back for an update from Titania.
As another reader posted, "I would pay to have the next chapter".
I've been checking everyday for the next chapter, please, give me an estimated time frame!
So I would recommend you check back here Wednesday evening 8:30 pm Pacific time and I will estimate submit date and thus posting date from there. It is hard for me to judge how long it will take...especially when I have to live up to your high standards ;), but I should know by then.
I love love LOVE it! Ill be dying waiting for the next chapter to be posted!
Wow! One of the best stories I've read, it really pulls you in and I've loved every chapter! Quick, I need to know what happens, I'm late right now but I had to finish reading and leave a comment ;)
I will do my darndest to have chapter 8 ready to submit by Friday evening. Sorry it is taking so long, but I am swamped at work and haven't gotten into the 'flow' of the new chapter. Plus, it has taken a lot of writing and rewriting to get the evolution of Brynna's emotions down, so...tedious, very tedious.
At first I was upset that the wait is so long in between chapters but then I thought to myself a) at least you communicate with us, unlike the other authors who just leave us hanging forever or post sporadically. and b) the wait feels like so long because I am so invested in the story, which is to say its perfectly written. I was devastated at the end of chapter 6 and felt fear that Brynna is lost to the falls at the end of this one. If you decide to publish this in book form I will buy a copy to show my appreciation and support. YOU ARE AMAZING!
It is greatly appreciated, especially with this story, which is so captivating and gripping! I can't wait for Chapter 8.
Happy that you let us know when to expect the following Chapter, it's grately apriciated. I'll check in on Friday!! XD
I know that was only a projected submit date, and be assured we'd all rather have the chapter delayed but written how you want, rather than hurried and not quite what you wanted. But I'm excited! This is my favorite series. I hope Literotica can have the story posted by early next week.... I've been checking twice a day! Love love LOVE your writing, Titania! The plot and the sex are fantastic (excluding the rape, of course), and I am really looking forward to Malik's attempt at redemption!
Last night. I did not write an introduction for it so Ill just say, please trust me...but we're about to take a lull in the story...so bear with me please!
You are so thoughtful to keep us updated through out this story. A fabulous writer and a thoughtful, kind person. We're lucky you're here.
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