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by Anonymous

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by tazz31711/18/12

FIRST...LAST....AND ONLY

doesnt have longevity involved, TK U MLJ LV NV

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by erectus12311/22/12

keep truck'en, errr fuck'en

starts nicely but concludes poorly, needs work, kill last lines, go for smoother language flow, observational comments to 3rd party reader kill intimacy

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