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by Anonymous

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by tazz31711/18/12

KNOCK...KNOCK......WHOS THERE

one who wishes to cum in, TK U MLJ LV NV

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by ArjayEiff11/18/12

picture to go with the words

http://www.tumblr.com/blog/arjayeiff

about 1/3 of the way down

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by Desejo11/19/12

Interesting concept, and a brave move to associate a word like oxymoron with a woman's body. I think the last line is weak, however. There is not much of a contraction between admired and entered - how about ending it with something like:
to hear your screams, and sighs?

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by ArjayEiff11/21/12

desejo

Good point, and with the benefit of your objective lens, I'm now feeling a little disappointed in the last two lines. Plundered and treasured roughly maintain the oxymoron conceit, and cradled / pressed is close (but could be better); admired / entered is just not at the same game.

Needs think time.

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