All Comments on 'A Desolate Stretch of Highway'

There was a lot of hot stuff in your story. It just took a little while to get into it and some sentences seem laboured, e.g. 'seemingly happy'. I know you're trying to convey that you appeared to be having the perfect life but that will come across even if you just say 'happy' - oh and then this bombshell dropped literally into your lap. Make the non=sexual passages as snappy as the sexual?