by JuliaBonham
You have written a nice first story. I like the way you describe how Sarah was dealing with her ex boss Will and How James arrived at the right time to save Sarah from Will raping her. I hope you write another in this story and expand how Sarah and James get-together after his saving her.
is good, all good. but I just do not get turned on by stories like that. I just can't figure out the erotic point in it. violance just doesn't add for me. sorry
Liked the story and the happy ending/new beginning, but doesn't seem to belong on an erotic story site.
Ignore the morons. Write what you want to. This was well written...I did think you ended it too soon...felt like there was a significant part of the story left untold.
I agree with whoever said to ignore the morons.
Is this going to be continued? Seemed unfinished to me, also a little editing would help it.
Wow. Amazing first story. Keep going. If you are to write in this genre then don't be afraid of the sex crazed idiots. A longer story and a note at the begining should suffice to say that this is not a stroke story for the strokers. p s supprised that they can read. X
Poor little pathetic female that can't take care of herself? Jumping from one "knight in shining armor" to another? I don't get it - the plot is??? The point is??? Shades of the 19th century, why didn't you just have her swoon and faint away cold, only to be awakened by the gentle caress of his hand.... Gees girl, get a backbone.
it was great! but could you please add more? it kinda jumped from this to that. overall, awesome story!
It is a great opener and I so want more! Please write another chapter I want to know what happens between James and Sarah!
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