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by HawkerDeHavilland

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AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
Very Good

Beautifully written

bachgenbachdrwgbachgenbachdrwgover 11 years ago
A good concept

However, I feel that it would have benefitted greatly from an objective proof-read. The action does not, IMHO, flow smoothly. Spelling and punctuation could be improved as could the geography. When using Welsh (not Gaelic) be sure to mutate correctly. Diolch yn fawr am eich ymdrech a parhewch i ysgrifennu :-) Look forward to the continuation.

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
Exciting

Please continue the story. Have someone help you with editing, for it is a tale worth telling.

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There is a tide in the affairs of men, which taken at the flood leads on to fortune omitted? All the voyage of their lives is bound in shallows and in misery And we must take the current when it serves, or lose our ventures