by Leonari
The role reversal was a little ... Strange but hey it's different, look forward to reading more :-)
A little odd, but a great read overall. Maybe in the next installment the brother has toughened up and there is a power struggle in bed. He wants it one way, she wants its another, and they fight/fuck it out.
Go find a dictionary, if you possess one, and look up two words.
1) breath, plural 'breaths'.
2) breathe, no plural because it is an action, as in "she breathes in and out".
Also, why do you frequently, and unnecessarily, use semi-colons - ;?
Example "When you cried and begged me to stop I; liked it. I'm sorry! I lost it and just; gave in to my dark side "So.. Big brother; are we ok? Can you forgive me?" Why after 'I', why after 'just' and why after 'brother'?"
Example "You'd; tell mom and dad?" - Why use one after 'You'd'?
The semicolon (;) has only one major use. It is used to join two complete sentences into a single written sentence when all of the following conditions are met:
(1) The two sentences are felt to be too closely related to be separated by a full stop;
(2) There is no connecting word which would require a comma, such as and or but;
(3) The special conditions requiring a colon are absent.
Overall the story is good, but do a spell check at least on your next one. I also think you need an editor to improve.
is he a sissy boy or a 98lbs weakling. is the the little sis a slut or was she a virgin too? if he is such a pussy how did he get any other girlfriends and stay a virgin and not get ass raped by the whole town? if he told the parents would they look at him and say dont be a dumbass she could not hurt you or would they know he is such a fucking pussy that he needs to wear a helmet so he wont hurt his head when he combs his hair?
I liked this work and hope for a continuation but i strongly disagree with their image of him being so wimpy cause anyone can be submissive or dominating
I like the story, and no it doesn't make a guy a "pussy" to be submissive I'm dominant and guys being submissive really turns me on, and this story did to so stop being pig headed you guys out there
English is not my first language, I guess you can tell that.
Originally I did not place even one semicolon in this story, but apparently the editors of the website itself disapproved of the way it was written at first and thus referred me to a helpful section right here in Literotica. According to what was written there semicolons - ; - are apparently a pause that is slightly longer than what a comma would be. And so, thats how I used them when editing this. Yes I guess having an editor would have been more effective, but I thought I could just do it myself...
And to the people saying "he's a sissy". Let me give you a pearl of wisdom: In this world it is actually very brave and shows a great strength of character to openly be a weak, sensitive and straight man.
Nothing higher in nature than cumming in your sister when you know she is not on birth control. If you knock her up the baby will be the closest possible to reproducing yourself. So your orgasm is the ultimate both mental and physical.
It actually reminds me of the times me and my own sister would fuck! I cummed in her several times, but no baby. Ah well, great story that brought back some highly erotic memories.
I have voted 5***** for this lovely story - and the grammar works very well. Let us have more of it.
At first I was a little put off at his crying, but I like where it went! Please continue this!
the sister was just to much of a demanding bitch no way any guy would ever want to be around her ever. this should have been in the fetish or nonerotic area.
would he EVER want anyhting to do with her EVER AGAIN either keep it believable (which this is not) or post it in the NONEROTIC AREA, as is this sucks big time.
Strange story; strange twist; strange weakling for a brother. Hypothetically, yes, it's possible for a woman to rape a man, and that's what this episode is. (Just switch the roles and see if people don't yell, "rape!") "Dominant" is one thing; "rapist" is another thing entirely. This belongs in the "Nonconsentual" list.
"You heard me! You liked what you saw out there didn't you." I stared at her baffled, I couldn't say a word. "You were staring at me, you're attracted to me; admit it!" she just confronted me like that.
"Wait, what? How'd you come to think that? I wouldn't; You're my sister!" I stammered again.
@@@ Oh great, we've got a retarded, lying idiot here! ...and why would he be stuttering and stammering, this is his sister that he's been around all his life! @@@
Wanna join me?" she asked as if she was about to watch a movie instead of taking a shower, naked.
@@@ umm, fuck yah sis, Im right behind you! @@@
I almost fell down the stairs from shock, "Mandy!" I nearly yelled. "What.. don't just say stuff like that!" I scolded her; she simply smiled and blushed.
@@@ What is he, like ten?! A real brother would only be worried about getting caught and getting her preggo! Lol. @@@
I stepped back down the stairs, stunned. "What?" I managed to blurt out and blinked at her; "Sis! This is way too wrong! You can't think about me like that, i'm your brother!"
@@@ Ok, this is totally gay!! NO brother would EVER say stupid shit like that! @@@
I covered my face in shame as her hand gripped my erect penis, she caressed it;
@@@ What fucking planet is this idiot from?!? @@@
"Sis.. No, I can't do this, i'm not ready for this, please; lets wait?"
@@@ No really, what planet?? @@@
...ok, well that was as weird as fuck! Its kinda twisted though, and definitely not where I thought it was going, hehe I actually wish there a second part! Thanks .
a bit more diff. from normal stories not much erotic but good in its own way
I think girl always says go easy on me but here I think she got big dick then him n being raped in ass totally shit
Gr.eat story I like a strong girl also. Pls write more in this genre. Is the story real or fiction
She seems like a good person who loves her brother and would be there for him anytime.
I really liked it. Who cares if it's believable or not, most of the stories on this site push the envelope. The stronger younger sister happens to be a button pusher for me so I gave it a five and only wish there had been more. Thanks now please come back and finish it.
This story needs a part 2. With more sexual domination by Mandy and hopefully some feats or tests of strength.
Great story. Unique and well written. Wish you neglect negative comments and write more like this. Please ;)
If I had a sister like that I would be one happy bunny god knows I would be extatic
Iike your story very much, there are a few women who are really into very rough dominant sex. Met a Norwegian girl, who was slightly taller (let say a Smack Down woman wrestler. I got the fucking of my life. In the motel, she kissed so roughly that my lips were bleeding. Up to this point of sexual encounters ONE, We were naked in a minute, she is on top of me kissing me grinding me she after a few minutes painful kissing, she cowboyed at first then she fucked me like she was a man, she was slamming down hard and grinding. She was having mini orgasms and she hold still for about half minute and start hammering again, I shot one intense load she kept pounding, she wasn't concerned about me cumming only hers orgasms after maybe an hour or more she stop. I start playing with her clit, she puts hands on my head and places right where she wanted it and fucked my face and yes I was having breathing. More in the morning. I was confused, but knew I liked it for the orgasms. But her being in control of torched maybe once and a while.