All Comments on 'In the Fog'

A couple of good ideas here, but not written well enough to do them justice.

I agree with the first commentor. You do have some wonderful ideas though!

Several different times you give us some piece of information then two sentences later the exact opposite: "the gargoyle's cock was MUCH larger-" "Fortunately, his cock wasn't much larger" or "I'm gonna lose my anal virginity" -"the head went in much easier than my ex's". A couple nice ideas, but this kind of randomness makes it unreadable.