All Comments on 'Love Song # 2'

I really liked the general tone and feel of the poem, the way you managed to scan mainly blank verse in all but one line - superb and the overarching rhythm

I was less keen on the extra syllable at line 6 - 11 syllables - 1 too many; two arms in the first couplet and the arm being wrapped safely - surely the arm gives the aura of safety? And some nit-picky missing punctuation - e.g.: line 5 needs a colon or dash after listen and line 11 needs a couple commas perhaps; a colon after lips in line 13, commas in line 14

its better to be from within, TK U MLJ LV NV