All Comments on 'Sir Jeffrey and the Sceptre Ch. 09'

I like how you always remind the reader of what the women look like. It's a nice visual aid. I also like how your stories are only one page. Good things come in small packages. One thing I'd recommend, though, is to mix things up. Most of the time, the sex takes place in the bedroom, on the bed. What would happen if the sex took place... in the throne room? What would have happened if Captain Karen stayed with Sir Jeffrey? Could there have been enough magic in him for both at once? You're a good writer, you can do it!