All Comments on 'Concealment'

out in the open, TK U MLJ LV NV

Well done!

I don't think there is anyone on Lit who is as consistently good as you have been with erotic poetry. I look forward to seeing your submissions.

Having been admonished recently (and justifiably) for using too many pronouns in a poem, I have to ask (no need to reply; this is a rhetorical question) is there some way you could have personified this male and female sexual energy and inserted those words for a few of the pronouns?

"....her kneeling's so conducive/to renewed power that is not discursive" I really liked.