All Comments on 'Fun in the Sun'

PLEASE, pick a name and use it. John, Steve, even Barbara, just NOT "you"!! I did not do anything with you so stop saying "you did {whatever}".

2 Paragraphs in and I'm sure I won't waste my time on this story. 1 star.

Shame you didn't leave a name so I could direct a personal response to you and ask what else was wrong with it in your opinion. All comments are welcomed! My story might not everyone's thing but I write for myself. If you like it then great, if not then never mind!

Well written and very sexy, more stories please ! .... Hector.

Wisht this were a film! Very hot. Hope we get to see what happens next! Thanks for writing.