...and ignoring your needs, huh? I would have approaced this by first licking you all over. Then flipping you around into 69 and feeding my cock to you slower.
Sometimes i's easier to get the lady willing to suck cock when she has a live and enthusiastic tongue twirling around her pussy and clit.
But that's me. Hopefully you have been properly intoduced to an experienced tongue.
Keep on writing; I'll look for your next story! 4*
You can write.. Keep it going
I get that the factor here is power and submission and that's what is supposed to turn the reader on, but this story is not about getting a cock shoved in your mouth than it is about giving head. It was very light on description as to what the main character is doing, save for one small reference to "increasing the suction with my lips" or something to that effect. It's also light on description of arousal, aside from writing that you were "turned in". When he pulled your hair did it hurt? Hurt in a good way? Send shivers down your spine? I think if you focus in on capturing those details you will have a more compelling read, and it won't read like how a man thinks a woman feels during a BJ if that makes any sense.
It is well written save for these things, I think you should definitely keep writing :)
Thanks to everyone who commented. Particulary the last comment. I'm not very good at describing how it felt am I. I could never think of the right analogies to make it real. I have to say I'm blown away by the response so far and will try and say more about how it feels next time. It is probably the most important part.
Would be much better if he had shown more appreciation instead of trying to get as much as he could at once....oh yeah college. I was a little older by the time I really got going and I still show signs of being an asshole
You wrote quickly very similar to what you experienced. I think with more practice you can become a good writer. If you really liked sucking cock then more experience will help there as well. Suggest you use your hand around the base to control how much and how deep someone pushes a cock into your mouth or throat. Good luck and look for more of your experiences and fantasy.
Congradulations. Though not quite a story, your account of your first blow was very HOT. Your honesty shone with such sincerity that it brought back memories of the first time a gal sucked me off and I'm quite a bit older than you. With respect to advice, do what comes naturally (no pun intended), don't be inhabited, act on your desires and relish the fact that you like to swallow. as if it were a blessing. Keep working at both cock sucking and writing erotica. You seem to be a natural at both. Recall your adventures in the privacy, delight in them and let your imagination have its way with them. Journalists are journalists. Writers of erotic fiction embelish and exagerate in the the service of erotica. I'd like to say more but this is not the appropriate venue so I'll drop a line or two in your contact box. Eagerly awaiting round two.
Wow, how about a date.
I like the eye contact. Very few gals do it, but it is a real extra turn on. One gal I knew would moan when the cum began. Another would speed up the sucking when the end was near.
Please write some more.
It is good to start out with small size so not intimidated. A way to take charge is to have guy shave and call it cute penis. It will work wonders in relationship.
I hope you can write more stories like this. I like stories that focus on oral.
I hope you will share more.
Enjoyed your story very much. Looking forward to more submissions!
If you wanted to makeout after swallowing my load would be just fine with me.
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