All Comments on 'Maggie'

Enjoyed the details and intimacy. Could read a bit more smoothly by cleaning up things like personal pronoun usage as the object of a sentence. For example: "There were hundreds of people surrounding us, but in my mind it was only she and I." This would normally be "... but in my mind it was only her and me." One simple test you can always use is to take out one of them and leave the other and see if it sounds right or not. Also "There is no one in the world more beautiful than her." Or "There is no one in the world more beautiful than she is."

Nice work over all.

Wouldn't you?