Good Ending, Thanks!
Anyone who thinks your story is ridiculous is now Roger, Anonymous and a testicular-ridden asshole victimizing poor little authors. Dude, get over it. You've written good stories, Gamer Goddess being a prime example, but this story was and still is a bad joke.
Specifically addressing your comments on this story, I'll point out that I'm a BTB fan, be it burn the bastard or burn the bitch. Because revenge against deserving cheaters is the ultimate justice. However, there has to be scale and proportion or every single one of those stories might as well end in "and then he shot her dead, infected all her lovers with aids and lived happily ever after". Those stories are stupid, and illustrate reasonable characters turning into raging vicious psychopaths. There's no justice in that, no reason, no fairness. They stop being a victim and start being an animalistic perpetrator.
But more importantly, they become caricatures. A joke, and a very bad one. Their behavior is inexcusable, so far out of proportion that you can't help but wonder what the author went through that he thinks something like that is a NORMAL response.
Specifically regarding this story, I never saw this as a reconciliation story, and it's fucking bizarre as hell that you have him and Flo staying together after her complete disrespect for him. What the fuck, really? After all that preachy victimized nonsense about how your character's response was perfectly appropriate because he was so terribly wronged, you see him forgiving this cunt and getting back together for hot threesomes?
Yeah, about those threesomes. He just traumatized both of these women with a vicious attack on everyone involved that included toruture, blackmail, coercion, cheating and outright lying. So both of them want to continue having hot sex with him? Ironically, I gave you high stars for that punchline on an otherwise over-the-top previous chapter, but this ending is just idiotic with no punchline to save it. You should have stopped where you were.
We did not think anyone could pull off an epilogue to your chapter 1, but you did it amazingly enough. Kudos all around. [Hope Roger/anon rots in hell.]
and I am not into it. There is no way she could respect him now and there is no way he or they could even look at each other after that night. But you worked out an ending and I applaud your effort.
DON'T LIKE USEN ANONEMOUSE COMMENTER WELL TOUGH TITTY SAID THE KITTY
Particularly the end, but you have to write stories to understand why.
Just a bunch of stupid, uincaring people.
You paint a very cutting scenario. There was a wash of emotions and I eat that shit up! I think that the characters as described by you (a small rewrite on the originals) behaved in a credible fashion.
But...I hated the ending. Excuse me. Hate is a strong word. Disappointed is closer. It went from a welter of emotions, pain and harm straight into frat boy fantasy #69, which I fell cheapened the story.
Pretty girls frequently go on to be happy. So many men are out there to try to make it possible. But they can still have regret. They can still have remorse.
You are uneven in your punishments. Flo was fully as culpable as Roger. She didn't regret a thing until AFTER her husband was wreckage and wretched. THEN she was sorry. Big Deal. It's all fun and games until someone looses an id.
And yet she gets him back and merry bisexual sex. SHE WENT OUT OF HER WAY TO HUMILIATE AND CHEAT ON HER HUSBAND.
She chose another man constantly. And she skips around.
You love pretty women too much. Some of them are rotten.
This epilogue felt right to me. It was a good story and all is well that ends well. Personally, I would have killed Roger.
A very clever way of getting out of a very certain prison sentence.
"I was no better than them." I think that realization is what ultimately led to them reconciling. Actually, he was worse.
Loved the story and the payback.Yes taking her back after equally guilty conduct was weak but that was your choice. I most heartly object to the killing of Roger's innocent dog as a form of payback.
The Ending and agree I like Happy endings if possible.. it was good for everyone to realise what they Had. and to try to keep it together.. Maybe they should just just a "promise" ring one for Both Ladies and one for him and stay as a threesome.
The story regenerated like a Phoenix in that room of revenge, redoleant with smell of singed skin and toasted hair follicles. Tight, terse dialogue with all four people pyches and epidermis raw and exposed. The ' poly ending ', however, felt like a slipshod, inorganic splice to story.
Those types of relationships are only sustainable with people of much more healthy hearts and minds. The author just did too excellent a job, rubbing sandpaper across the characters' souls to make me believe that graft would take. Everybody involved needed years of counseling, to heal scars both interior and exterior.
Loved the ultimate exile of Roger and found in sum this story to be uber-provocative. Texas Tall Tales has worked hard on this and I thank him. I also curse him, just a bit. My morbid mind is wondering how Rodger got his predilection for predatory, practical jokes and what exactly was his fate.
Did he learn anything or is he lurking online for novelty knick knacks to shock and awe his new neighbors ? As a story, this is a veritable moebius strip, chain of pain --- " if a man looks in the mirror and wonders if he's gone too far, he will not be wrong. "
loved the ending. roger got off too easy. i always wondered how you were going to resolve the last ending. thanks i love happy endings
(Always a but). Good ole Roger should of gotten his in the basement. And Good Ole Flo should of ended up getting a far more just payback (in this tale she most definitely did NOT).
Of course, it is easier to comment and criticize than to actually write a tale. So, Tx Tale Tale, my hat off to you.
to kill Roger yourself.
Actually, for a reason I'm not entirely clear on, I thought your continuation was as funny as heck...
Really. Up there with the best of HDK.
Sorta, fuck em all and let God sort it out...
if you know what I mean.
(and I generally >hate< clusterfuck endings as unjustified fratboy wish fullfillment - this time, I almost buy into the idea that he earned the priviledge. Not enough character development on Roger though...)
My thoughts about certain points.
About Jim not going after roger to even the scales: Well, I guess he was entitled to a little more payback but we all know that if he had gone after Roger, Roger would go after him until someone ended up dead. So, I support Jim's decision. Someone had to put an end to it and Jim did. And he got his payback with Alice ending up in his bed.
About Flo and Alice's friendship: I believe it was fixable, yes Flo was part of the problem that took them to those torture sessions, but Flo was simply naive. Jim was right, Roger wanted into her pants and used a different strategy that wouldn't ring any alarms. She just fell for it, though she should have listened to her husband.
Alice forgiving Jim: Alice said it, both Flo and Roger pushed him too far and Jim got carried away. I can understand her forgiving him, he was not the cause but the effect.
Jim's relationship with both Flo and Alice: Well, I can see Jim ending with each of them separately after the magnificent sex they have with Jim. But it was a surprise seeing them all ending together, even if temporarily.
About Jim and Flo not marrying: who cares about a ring if you can have what you want without it. Spending their lives together, no ring is necessary.
I liked very much the epilogue, it was a great way to end the story. Thanks tx tall tales.
This was like a Shakespearean tragedy, mate! Well done!
no funny at all your kind of jokes. why in hell should the husband, who could not forget the haunting jokes, forget about it all and no live with the 2 women together ? I guess you are more out of your mind than your characters. this story is two chapters too long and it's your chapters.
Is this garbage finally done, if so then maybe TX can sit down and write a decent story. Remember crap is still crap no matter how much you polish it.
STOP THE GOD DAMN MADNESS....
the ORIGINAL story was vile disgusting poorly written pile of cow shit because it never answered ONE KEY question:
WHY? ..... WHY?
By that I mean what kind of LOVING spouse FORCIBLY imprisons their spouse while the tortures them psychologically in " pretending" to have sex with another person in front of them ...or in the next room so that he/she can hear?
the original story was mindless drivel written by a retard. The ONE KEY Question was never asked.... and since this question is never asked the follow up question -- WHAT DOES IT MEAN ? -- can of course never be asked.
That is How authors force RAAC. The spouse never asks "WHAT DOES IT MEAN ?"
In the 1st version by this author of THE JOKE we see the idiot loser Husband STUNNED to see his whore wife again getting sucked into Roger's manipulation. But he does he ever ask his wife WHY she is doing this to him.. AGAIN?
no of course not. to ask such a question would be far too rational
In the sequel Texan's Epilogue we FINALLY have JIM ask the RIGHT question
"Why wouldn't you ever listen to me, Flo? How many times did I ask you to stop? How many times did I warn you it would go too far? Why couldn't you just stop?"
I loved you so much. I did. Why did you have to do this to us? Destroy everything we had? .."
Jim goes on...
How, Flo? *** HOW *** could he possibly use you? How was it possible that after all he'd done, you were even around him long enough to get used? How could you speak to him? All he ever wanted to do was belittle me in your eyes, so he'd have a better shot at getting in your pants. All you did was help him.
and FLO's answer... NOTHING. The story reads ...
'She was crying. "Where are we now, then?"...'
so in the end we dont KNOW why Flo o thought yeah... "torturing my husband mentally ... and imprisoning him against his well whole I fuck another man.. is going to be REALLY FUNNY!
why is the only thing harryinvirginia ever writes is bull shit comments. WRITE A FUCKING STORY IS YOU HAVE THE BALLS ASSHOLE.
We now KNOW what happens to "he who laughs last..."! AND it is NOT pretty! It was also painful to read, from soup to getting his nuts zapped! Will NOT be a favorite of mine, because of the pain, but it IS a highly recommended read!
Now that is a funny joke.
Well.....while I'm not too fond of some of the twists and turns....I mean the guy was semi-psychotic there near the end, for god's sake!
But make no mistake. Your writing and story-telling are bar none. 4 'cause that revenge scenario was just mean!
But 5 for style and just damn fine story-telling!
Roger, Alice and Jim were consistent characters but Flo was the odd man out. Still don't understand why a wife would do that to her husband .
Regarding Jim - in today's day and age , having seen road rage, witnessed inexplicable temporary madness and hear about impulsive suicides - I can see how he could behave like that for one particular day.
The three way seems implausible but the scenes, characters, dialogues makes us believe that this fucked up trio could well have found and forged some bond that day. A three way arrangement (unsure about all 3 people being present together) is not that unheard of in this day and age.
All in all -very entertaining.
Frankly, the original story was just too damn stupid to ever be fixed, but this was a good effort. The whole thing could have been handled simply by Jim filing assault and kidnapping charges and watching the two idiots serve jail time for it. The wife MAY have come back after 6 months to finally understand just how goddamn stupid she was. The only other real option left to Jim was something like this story.
Because he didn't kill Roger while he had the chance, he deserved Rogers paybacks. I think it's great that he was able to divorce the slut wife but keep her around as a fuck buddy. Now THAT'S A Happy Ending!
What is it about people to play jokes on others.
They never seem to know when to quit.
I guess that because they pick on people that they realy don't respect or like it the truth be known.
TX keep the stories comming.
I, apparently along with many other grateful readers, wanted to feel the rest of the story. You have done a masterful job bringing closure to my feelings. Obviously, in real life these antics would bring legal complications but in the art of fantasy this ending filled the bill.
Best regards and thank you.
Glad you are OK with MY comments
But Roger ................... well fuck him.
I have not read every story in the Literotica library; but I'm working on it. This, in my opinion, is the best series of stories I've ever read!! The original ending of Agena's "A Joke" was lame. Tx Tall Tales nailed it...home run...gold medal...grand prize winner!!
My first thought when he/she indicated it was going to be dark...very dark; my thinking was Jim would torture Roger and cut off his dick in front of the women. Then knowing the legal shit he would be in for he would take the gun (a real one) and blow his head off leaving grey matter splattered all over Roger's face. That would certainly leave a lasting impression forever in the minds of the other three jokesters. (now that's DARK) However, I must say that I liked it much better the way TTT's decided to end it with the happy threesome and the story of Rogers demise. I Loved It !!!
Both the revenge chapter and this epilogue masterfully bridged fantasy and reality for me. Loved it.
fantasy-style revenge in previous chapter with a gritty realistic feel.. the epilogue extends this theme with a fantasy-style resolution with amazing, realistic emotional turmoil. Rhenquist-style real characters while pushing the plot to the edge of reality - and just over it... really well done.
I'll stop now before I get more redundantly effusive in my praise.. oh wait, too late.
I've been thinking about your writing and why I look forward to it so much. I think it comes down to this. You have a recurring theme of "ordinary people in extraordinary circumstances leading to pleasures that surpass the ordinary."
This series ends up fitting into that theme, although it took the epilogue to do so. Those complaining about the ending should recognize that this is your brand. Similarly, opening a bottle of Coke won't lead lead to a root beer float. The reason that we, your fans, enjoy your work is that our expectations are always met and often exceeded.
The TTT brand is a good one. The best, in my opinion. Write what you write and I will enjoy it. Thank you for your artistry.
I loved this ending (I love happy endings). Rock on!!!
Appreciate the follow up to your story.
Of all the stories I've read on this site... This one made me laugh the hardest. LOVE the comments on Roger... Stubbed his toe twice a day! ROFLMAO.
Epilogues are sometimes very necessary and only conscientious good writers provide them. Your story needed it and it worked. I like happy endings and this one was lukewarm but nevertheless good. Roger couldn't get enough snake venom in my humble opinion. Flo and her hubby should've moved to a totally new start with renewed marriage vows maybe a winning lottery ticket or a major unexpected inheritance. Alice was nice and was the innocent bystander and her sharing the bed with Flo and hubby was not the outcome I was looking toward. The story was thoughtful well-written and well developed. There are philosophical differences in opinion but it is in fact your story nit mine. I like your writing style and your thorough descriptions. Thanks for a nice ending
No need for a story. 5 stars for Rogers ending! Keep up the great story writing!
That's right, I was deciding which one of your stories to read first, and hit the stars by accident. This story is back to more of your style, so lets pretend I gave you four stars. Welcome back, Buddy.
The above applies to author only.
He created characters to his liking.
Flo should have been brain dead to behave like she did. Hubby was way too tolerant beyond belief. The only one believable was this lowlife Roger.
Garbled ending to all at the end to make the story crap
Lots of twists and turns. The end sums it up. Fuck you Roger. Fuck everybody that looks like like you. Fuck your mother and your father. Also, eat shit and die.
HA HA HA
Why take it to that point the original was much better and realistic.
Just to piss off the guy who gave it a two. Petty revenge? Isn't it all.
I liked this ending better.
As to the guy who says unbelievable. I dunno. Men are romantics. They have faith that love will conquer all. Sometimes it doesn't And it takes some men a long time to wake up. A clever woman can string things along for decades. Not good enough to make things work. Not bad enough to call it quits. How do I know? Well I was personally stupid for 40 years. "Maybe this time she will see the light" especially after hearing from her "If I knew it would be this good I'd do it all the time." And it was bliss. For a while. Fooled me. All she needed to do was give me a taste (every few years) when it looked to her like it was crumbling. Besides. I couldn't do it to the kids. Until they were on their own.
As always love your work...Write faster!
Probable I have with the tale (though well written) is that the thought that Jim became part of the problem in a little like blaming the paper for catching on fire when a flame is held to it. Blame the flame; blame Flo and Roger. As for forgiveness, forget it. Roger should of walked away and been done with her.
betrayed saying "fuck you Roger" when everyone except him knows he is the "roger" - fucking brilliant man, delicious irony.
You are a fine writer and I enjoy your stories very much.
This one though was not enjoyable, everything was a bit too extreme.
babble drivel worthless non sense acting.
typical worthless ttt tales
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