Loved the contradictory and complex themes that fawguy dared to take on. The narrator got the sexual dynamo he always wanted, but at a fearsome price.
Some of the details of the trumped up rape charges were slipshod but the theme of a miscarriage of justice turning his life inside out was rife with possibility.
I enjoyed gotcha twist outing the wife as a hardcore cheater was neatly played. Should he stay or go? Personally I'd be out the door but that's up to the individual.
Very entertaining story, albeit with some cretibility gaps. This author is showing a steady slope of improvement in my eyes. I thank him for his hard work.
It was tough being sympathetic because both husband and wife were cheaters. He cheated first but she made up for lost time. Luckily the truth came out about the rape but by then the marriage was over. Well written as usual and no real revenge was needed as both were unfaithful.
and with a definite hint of originality.
There were some issues with the writing: at one point you slipped into third person narrative, for example - which suggests that more severe editing and proof-reading is required. At the same time, you have a good, realistic style that involves the reader with your characters.
It actually deserves a '4' but I'm going to give '5' because I want to see more of your work and see how you develop as a writer.
A great story! Couldn't stop reading until it was done. A few spelling errors, but the storyline made up for any grammer mistakes. Best story I've read here in a long time! Keep em cumming!!
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Anonymous01/22/13
Technical problems.
You use long paragraphs and toss in dialogue from different speakers in one paragraph. It is not only unconventional, but makes the story more difficult to read and more boring than need be.
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Anonymous01/22/13
Ok story
i appreciate that the weeping, pleading woman is popular, but to me it was excessive. Making her go out on a bit of a fuck fest when phe went to jail, the author made her a total cheating slut eliminating any subtlty, and created a cartoon character of her.
Lots of editorial issues, Slipping into the third person voice after their post jail fuck, kind of jarring
I found the story too formulaic with no ambuigety, all black and white.
i would give you a 5 but you let the fucking girl off the hook and she fucking ruined his life. he was wrong in getting strange once a month but his wife was just a pure fucking whore. she had a full on affair with her boss for we dont know exactly how long. she was a gang bang slut and she wanted him back. hitting it once after he got out of jail and everything was dismissed was ok, i guess, he had to find out how open she was. but once a month with a gang bang slut - no fucking way - not even with her bosses cock. and why no payback with his team mates and who took the fucking picture and gave it to the wife - bet she gave him a taste as a thiank you.
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Anonymous01/22/13
what 5 stars ? can't believe you all, really
first of all where is the erotic point here.
we have a young girl who will willingly have sex with 3 guys and then accuses an inocent of raping him. with this a man is definitly ruined for life, 100 %.
then a cop beats him up, how nice no consequences.
the husband cheats, very nice
and the wife is simply said a roundheeled slut, the townbike and a very good example for her daughters
and that is good and an erotic story ?
3 stars max for good writing style the rest is rather puke than having a stiff one
Come by now, I this isn't the first fawguy88 story you've read
this guy is Matty M's brother. The wives are sluts to the 10 power and the husband is just that a "fawguy". This was no different and we can what type of guys love these types of stories. ;)
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Anonymous01/22/13
The only way I would stick my cock in the sluts asshole is if after fucking she suck her shit and my cumm off of my cock while I pissed in her mouth. And,,,, I would never ever see the whore again
FallGuy got lazy. He wrote himself into an awkward spot, so he figured out an after-the-fact fix about the 'evidence' he had before the rape incident started, but only disclosed near the tale's end. Only the batteries were mentioned at the time. It might have required some careful writing (after some creative thinking) to also touch those bases, like DID happen with the dead batteries. Instead we get "Ah yes, there were a bunch of other clues, which are going to come as a complete surprise to my readers, about your slutiness before MY trouble erupted, but I carefully hid it from everyone and didn't even change my behavior with you, Sweetie!" BULLSHIT!
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Anonymous01/23/13
god some of you are morons! husband ONLY cheated but she was awful in bed
only it turns out thw cunt whore wife was NOT awful in bed. .. she had getting her ass fucked by her boss for months... then denying her husband and lying about it!
ARe you people fucking stupid?
even worse it was his cheating... caused by lying cunt whore wife.... as to WHY she thought he DID rape that girl
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Anonymous01/23/13
Daughters name
Stopped reading when the daughter name started changing from Beth to Brenda. Poor editing and tech difficulties too distracting.
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Anonymous01/23/13
Worst story Award
Absolutely the worst excuse for an erotic story I've read here. Complete garbage.
I understand this guys anger toward his wife/ex-wife. However, she was spot on when she pointed out all of his indiscretions. Was he any better? I fail to see his anger over how she had lied to him about her anal virginity or about having an affair with her boss prior to his incarceration. Was he not guilty of the same? Was he mad because she had lied to him? He lied about the number of affairs he had even after she caught him. She was right, her actions only served to even the score. Was he upset over her lack of faith in him? This would have been a better angle to play. However, you have to see things from her perspective. He was a cheater who lied to her constantly, even after being confronted by her. Then he gets arrested and charged with rape. She had to wonder if she even knew this man after all these years being married. I can't say I blame her for assuming his guilt.
Then, he falls into a friends with benefits relationship with her and they fuck on a regular basis. That is the most surprising turn in the story. Why doesn't he simply take her back? To me, they are on equal footing. IMHO
you missed the point. the husband fucked a few on the road when his wife refused sex but the wife forgave him after counseling. but the wife had a relationship that spanded many months, it was not a one time fuck and then stopped. it was more than that and then she just turned into a whore. there is a big difference, but i would never have sex with her after that shit - who the hell knows what she caught. using her like a whore after he caught her and not marrying her was ok, except she probably has a cunt like a petri dish. i still gave it a 4.
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Anonymous03/11/13
fawguy88 ..... One question ..
After reading several of your stories, do you really get a "hard on" making your lead male characters weak, pathetic cuckolds?
English
Bittersweet !
Loved the contradictory and complex themes that fawguy dared to take on. The narrator got the sexual dynamo he always wanted, but at a fearsome price.
Some of the details of the trumped up rape charges were slipshod but the theme of a miscarriage of justice turning his life inside out was rife with possibility.
I enjoyed gotcha twist outing the wife as a hardcore cheater was neatly played. Should he stay or go? Personally I'd be out the door but that's up to the individual.
Very entertaining story, albeit with some cretibility gaps. This author is showing a steady slope of improvement in my eyes. I thank him for his hard work.
Great Tale
It was tough being sympathetic because both husband and wife were cheaters. He cheated first but she made up for lost time. Luckily the truth came out about the rape but by then the marriage was over. Well written as usual and no real revenge was needed as both were unfaithful.
Entertaining, enjoyable
and with a definite hint of originality.
There were some issues with the writing: at one point you slipped into third person narrative, for example - which suggests that more severe editing and proof-reading is required. At the same time, you have a good, realistic style that involves the reader with your characters.
It actually deserves a '4' but I'm going to give '5' because I want to see more of your work and see how you develop as a writer.
Thank you
I enjoyed reading your story. Thank you.
A definate 5 star!
A great story! Couldn't stop reading until it was done. A few spelling errors, but the storyline made up for any grammer mistakes. Best story I've read here in a long time! Keep em cumming!!
Technical problems.
You use long paragraphs and toss in dialogue from different speakers in one paragraph. It is not only unconventional, but makes the story more difficult to read and more boring than need be.
Ok story
i appreciate that the weeping, pleading woman is popular, but to me it was excessive. Making her go out on a bit of a fuck fest when phe went to jail, the author made her a total cheating slut eliminating any subtlty, and created a cartoon character of her.
Lots of editorial issues, Slipping into the third person voice after their post jail fuck, kind of jarring
I found the story too formulaic with no ambuigety, all black and white.
i would give you a 5 but you let the fucking girl off the hook and she fucking ruined his life. he was wrong in getting strange once a month but his wife was just a pure fucking whore. she had a full on affair with her boss for we dont know exactly how long. she was a gang bang slut and she wanted him back. hitting it once after he got out of jail and everything was dismissed was ok, i guess, he had to find out how open she was. but once a month with a gang bang slut - no fucking way - not even with her bosses cock. and why no payback with his team mates and who took the fucking picture and gave it to the wife - bet she gave him a taste as a thiank you.
what 5 stars ? can't believe you all, really
first of all where is the erotic point here.
we have a young girl who will willingly have sex with 3 guys and then accuses an inocent of raping him. with this a man is definitly ruined for life, 100 %.
then a cop beats him up, how nice no consequences.
the husband cheats, very nice
and the wife is simply said a roundheeled slut, the townbike and a very good example for her daughters
and that is good and an erotic story ?
3 stars max for good writing style the rest is rather puke than having a stiff one
Smelling salts! You couldn't make it up!
Blistering storytelling, great entertainment - an editor would only take away the brilliant tackiness of this tale. Loved it. 5*
Come by now, I this isn't the first fawguy88 story you've read
this guy is Matty M's brother. The wives are sluts to the 10 power and the husband is just that a "fawguy". This was no different and we can what type of guys love these types of stories. ;)
The only way I would stick my cock in the sluts asshole is if after fucking she suck her shit and my cumm off of my cock while I pissed in her mouth. And,,,, I would never ever see the whore again
Laziness
FallGuy got lazy. He wrote himself into an awkward spot, so he figured out an after-the-fact fix about the 'evidence' he had before the rape incident started, but only disclosed near the tale's end. Only the batteries were mentioned at the time. It might have required some careful writing (after some creative thinking) to also touch those bases, like DID happen with the dead batteries. Instead we get "Ah yes, there were a bunch of other clues, which are going to come as a complete surprise to my readers, about your slutiness before MY trouble erupted, but I carefully hid it from everyone and didn't even change my behavior with you, Sweetie!" BULLSHIT!
god some of you are morons! husband ONLY cheated but she was awful in bed
only it turns out thw cunt whore wife was NOT awful in bed. .. she had getting her ass fucked by her boss for months... then denying her husband and lying about it!
ARe you people fucking stupid?
even worse it was his cheating... caused by lying cunt whore wife.... as to WHY she thought he DID rape that girl
Daughters name
Stopped reading when the daughter name started changing from Beth to Brenda. Poor editing and tech difficulties too distracting.
Worst story Award
Absolutely the worst excuse for an erotic story I've read here. Complete garbage.
Enjoyed it
Well written. The arrest really surprised the heck out of me. The end was also a bt surprising. Thanks.
One more thing ...
I understand this guys anger toward his wife/ex-wife. However, she was spot on when she pointed out all of his indiscretions. Was he any better? I fail to see his anger over how she had lied to him about her anal virginity or about having an affair with her boss prior to his incarceration. Was he not guilty of the same? Was he mad because she had lied to him? He lied about the number of affairs he had even after she caught him. She was right, her actions only served to even the score. Was he upset over her lack of faith in him? This would have been a better angle to play. However, you have to see things from her perspective. He was a cheater who lied to her constantly, even after being confronted by her. Then he gets arrested and charged with rape. She had to wonder if she even knew this man after all these years being married. I can't say I blame her for assuming his guilt.
Then, he falls into a friends with benefits relationship with her and they fuck on a regular basis. That is the most surprising turn in the story. Why doesn't he simply take her back? To me, they are on equal footing. IMHO
Good Read****
Very enjoyable story. Thanks for sharing.
you missed the point. the husband fucked a few on the road when his wife refused sex but the wife forgave him after counseling. but the wife had a relationship that spanded many months, it was not a one time fuck and then stopped. it was more than that and then she just turned into a whore. there is a big difference, but i would never have sex with her after that shit - who the hell knows what she caught. using her like a whore after he caught her and not marrying her was ok, except she probably has a cunt like a petri dish. i still gave it a 4.
fawguy88 ..... One question ..
After reading several of your stories, do you really get a "hard on" making your lead male characters weak, pathetic cuckolds?
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