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The Good Deed

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by Anonymous

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by Silent9201/22/13

Damn!

Hoping you add more chapters to this!!!
Very good!

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by Anonymous01/23/13

Grammar quibbles

Breath is a noun, breathe is a verb, so someone takes two breaths, or someone breathes, but they don't take two breathes.

And "two-piece bikini" is redundant, unless you've seen a one- or three-piece bikini!

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by Anonymous01/23/13

Grammar quibbles... whole language quibbles

Seriously bad sentence formation and grammar.

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by Bourguit01/25/13

Thanks everyone!

Thanks everybody for your votes, comments, and personal feedback!
I'm sorry for the grammar mistakes, I will work on that. But I'm glad to see that the overall story is being well received.
If I get more requests for additional chapters, I write some.
Thanks again!

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by Anonymous01/25/13

HOT!!!

Keep writing, its HOT I love it!!!!!

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by Anonymous01/26/13

Can be way hotter with a little editing

Hi, I really enjoyed your story but will have to agree that you need some editing. But keep up the good work. F

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by Bahama03/14/13

Wow

That was worth reading twice !

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