Very good erotic imagery.
But it would be a good section to add into a full story, perhaps included as a letter or as part of a series of letters. The writing is good if not excitin g but you need to work on description. Why is everything done "slowly"?
I loved the energy and the way she was so sure of what she wanted. Thank you
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Short and sexy
Very good erotic imagery.
Not truly a Story
But it would be a good section to add into a full story, perhaps included as a letter or as part of a series of letters. The writing is good if not excitin g but you need to work on description. Why is everything done "slowly"?
I loved the energy and the way she was so sure of what she wanted. Thank you
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More submissions by qingming.