by DG Hear
It's a good story, but it seems to repeat itself, with variations, in the middle. Why he stopped partying has two explanations. It's mentioned in two places that he's not a particularly caring lover, but his sexuall skills don't appear to be germane.
He admits to not caring too terribly much about his wife, and the not caring overmuch seems to come through in the rest of the story. His lack of passion about himself or his wife may be the reason I don't feel more for him or the other people he describes.
I try to write stories the way people seem to be. It isn't always black and white in relationships but seems to be a lot of gray area. I see more and more of this each day with all the differences of opinions.
I write strickly as an amature and for the entertainment value most of my readers receive. Not all stories have happy ending. I may consider furthering this story after the contest is over depending on what comes out of my head. haha
Thank you to all you read my stories, it's always much appreciated.
With Respect
DG Hear
This story sounds like reporting in a small town newspaper - road construction and detours or something. There is nothing erotic or even emotional about it. The only purpose seems to be man's man and solid citizen demonstrating to the world what must be done with a cheating wife.
some how having sex with a black man is so taboo. Oh my God she has sex with a black man. Did it really matter? I guess if she fucked a Mexican made he could get past it but a black guy is unforgivable. I don't see where it made any difference what color guy she cheated with, she cheated.
What a waste of time. Cardboard cutouts for people. No depth to them at all. Unimaginative plot. Nothing original. The time line was a jumble, like it was put together with cut and paste. In a word: awful.
Not much insight, not much drama, not much reason to read. You've done much much better, Mr. Hear.
brown sugar never helps, nor does any sweetener. TK U MLJ LV NV
Consequence story. Very interesting sometime beween a revenge story and a consequence story very small is the difference. Several times a good writen epiloge with a good twist at the end is the different.
Jess turned out to be a terrible wife, one who cheats and lies, continued to cheat and lie and they the sham of a Valentine's Day dinner. She also was vindictive when her facade of a mariage was being stripped away from her she got her Father to take almost all the things in the apartment. Funny, since she was the one in the wrong all along. Getting rid of slut Jess was the best thing our hero could have done for himself.
not up to your normal good standards
He did not wimp out but the bitch got away too easily. As always DG got scared while getting even.
it seemed that he would walk away and didn't care about anything, as in the end the slut was hanging around with his sister in this world the sister would no everything.
I woke up. I got out of bed. I brushed my teeth. I went to work. I... Geez what an interesting collection of almost-events.
The charters are dull, the writing plods, the whole thing is just... I dunno, a snoozer.
But DGH is honest about one thing: "I write strickly as an amature" Yes, and you also write STRICTLY as an AMATEUR.
In fact it was obvious what was going to happen from the word go... Personally I like to have some tension. I would say he was lucky to find out that she was completely untrustworthy before they had children...
Does anyone really get off on these divorce stories? A story about a couple fighting and getting divorced is about the LEAST erotic thing possible to read.
..this really needed more work. Just look at all the repetition in the first few paragraphs.
It was not as original or interesting as DGH usually achieves. For example, the wife was so two-dimesional. At the very least it would have been interesting to know why she seemed so angry when he told her he was leaving. Given the background provided in the story she knew how important fidelity was to him so she should have expected it. After all she wasn't trying to hide her cheating much- she invited her lover(s) to meet her husband!
i love your work but this one was a little flat and lacked passion or emotion. sort of - well ho hum. but a good read.
Raleigh, NC to Flagstaff, AZ kinda story. Get on I-40, go West. Arrive!
Interracial was kinda like fueling up in Clinton, OK instead of Amarillo, TX, it really made no difference in anything!
There should have at least been a brief rationale about abortion. Both Hubby AND Sweetie are portrayed as people who would have opted for that immediately, rather than marriage! (Still DO, for that matter!)
You usually put more depth into your stories and don't fly through them quite like that. This story wasn't bad, but not quite at the same level as I'm used to you posting. Thanks for sharing. You shouldn't compromise on your stories, even if it's out of the normal genre you normally write.
He was boring , she was bored, and I was bored. What's with that!
Yawn!
DG, your story 'Didn't work out' either. Not worth rating. Can you now get back to your usual quality.
Peter
Ummmmm he just let her act like that after cheating and manipulating him? You right! Why do the guys in these stories always want to treat the woman who just fucked up your life with respect? That makes no fucking sense at all!!!
One big factor in this tale is that they really didn't fall in love head over heels. They married for the baby. which did not survive. She cheated. brought her husband to swing and he didn't care for it. So they split. Can't really call her a cheating whore because they didn't love each other. Not a bad tale. Thanks.
Your story feels like a bare-bones outline and not an actual story with your usual great characters and depth of story-telling. Maybe it's the pressure of the deadline or something, but while it's a passable story, it's really not up to part with what I'd consider a good DG Hear tale. Props for the effort though, you always entertain.
in six lines. Not good writing. I know you're better than that so I'm going to go eat, come back and start on paragraph three. No score yet D.G.
The story started out very interesting and then ended with little pizazz. Well written, but it felt like it needed something more toward the end. Since the guy kept mentioning how he didn't love his wife (not to mention they were only married two years), it was hard to care about the marriage ending. I figured there had to be something else about to happen.
I am surprised at all of the negative comments. Clear, concise, and credible story to me.
"Not with a bang but a whimper" Live is a lot like this story. Well done!
Good to see you back and writing.
Quite well told, but not a particularly interesting story.
Fourth and fifth paragraphs were a hook. Good writing. But after setting the scene for an interesting evening of tinkling the ebonies and ivories, you fucking meander off on some sentimental background about your blue collar roots and good ol' Dad (with a capital D) and her getting pregnant and spooning up to each other in the saddening dusk of an already loveless ill-conceived marriage and a not begotten lost child. Heavy. Not only the weed. And then...with the image of his wife that he cares little for in any case sucking the boss's dick (was it humungous? I missed that) whilst the gorgeous Chris wraps her ivories around the (humungous??) ebony pole of ...oh wait I'm getting confused here darn it. Off for some pudding..8*
dghear could have worked it better , it was too short not up to his standards.. you win some and you lose some
this may be the worst most boring story DG has ever written.
Think about this
"If you don't mind I have a few joints with me and it's an excellent grade. After drinking I like to smoke a joint or so. I have more than enough for all of us." replied Carl.
Before I could answer Jess said she didn't seen any problem with it so Carl lit up two joints and passed one over for Chris and I to share and said he would share his with Jess since she was sitting on the chair near him.
um WHAT? who the fuck lets that happen? is this guy a potted plant?
um yeah hello its my house...
DG...not one of your best stories, but still OK...can't believe that comment from AN....oh well!
The story title could have been this comment title.
The main problem with it, in my mind, is that it circled around the block a few times, came back to where it started and then took off in a different direction. Lacking in organization, unfortunately.
Feel's very rush liked you pumped it out to make it into the Valentines Day comp. Not up to your usual high standards DGH
Although the emotional level seemed to be a little flat, but the story was still enjoyable.
It just seemed that he was unemotional when he found out Jess was fucking around on him and he just wrote her off, like a bad business deal. Perhaps it was that he never really loved her in the first place.
Thanks for the read.
Not your best story, by far. It is a little disappointing to read a DG Hear story, and have it fall flat...usually it is just the reverse.
Should of been more consequences for her, such as discovering her lover had gotten her pregnant. Her lover destroys a marriage while getting free pussy; gets off free. A followup with deserved consequences is in order.
worthless cheaters deserve to burn and rot with nothing and she deserves to be treated like trash.
You should have done something about the predators, they were the one's that ruin the relationship. That was a big miss for me. Good read anyways keep it up
.... neither did your story! Too many wimp/cuck husbands appearing in your tales these days .. careful DG or you'll end up like "Ms." Moreau.
I was glad to see an entry in the contest from DGHear, usually a superb story teller. Not this time. Too short, too bland, too predictable. None of the characters had any redeeming qualities. The Henry's were just looking for a plaything, the wife just wanted a buddy to party with, and the hubby had the emotions of a fish (if that much). There is no need for a next chapter. The best part of this story is that it got the racists and the women haters in a tizzy.
I think Mr. Wolf should work on his editing skills, he seems to have trouble knowing which words to get rid of and how a sentence should flow in order to get maximum effect from each line.
If you deleted your first paragraph and began with "I was surprised. . ." it would have been better. You could work in later your disdain for celebration.
Concise and to the point is the way to my heart in a short story. You have good ideas and write fairly well, but lose it in the inconsistent storytelling.
I like tha fact you're still around. I recently found out about your stories && haven't being able to stop reading those brilliant masterpiece. Anyways, I didn't read this story sooner bcuz I was intrigued with your other work. && I have to sadly agree with with the other commets. Not your best work. && actually a second chapter can brighten everyone's mood....
P.S. For tha people who disrespected DG Hear. His not alone still has me && million other fans. So, don't bother making stuiped remarks about his story!!! Capisce?. Lol
To Huedog...don't be naïve...isn't that why we have interracial sex stories? White women having sex with black men has been historically taboo for 2-3 hundred years now in America. Isn't that what makes a stroke story more exciting for so many? How better can one make a white man a totally disrespected cuckold than by having his woman fuck a black man in preference to him? That's why these stories read better with black lovers instead of white. Sure we know that's not reality...but it sells much better as a fantasy. I am sure many black males are disgusted with this ongoing fantasy concerning their supposed size differences and special abilities to cum in huge quantities.
I...like you...wish that writers didn't use this fantasy in cheating wives stories. I can always go to interracial stories for that. I think most of us want some realism in cheating wives stories...though I realize all these stories are just that...stories!
Neither of these characters were much...but adding black lovers to the mix added even more humiliation upon the husband in this so-called marriage of convenience. The wife was bored and not really in love with her husband...so have her show even more contempt for her husband and the marriage. Nothing personal!
This story has too much sand and grit. It sounds too much like a macabre, french movie. Some folks like that, but, for me good sex should be dark or brooding, which this story definitely is. It's well written, just not my cup of coffee. It smacks of an outdated, racist, ethos that has no place in current American thought. It says in effect, that it's still alright for a white man to have sex with a black woman, but not vice versa. WRONG! Whatever is good for the goose... Please do not propagate this sexist, racist, wrong-headedness any further. Make your stories promote equality instead.
This story, with another chapter could very easily have him recognize the error of his thinking, and spend most of the chapter learning from Chris, Carl, and Jess how to be a better lover, citizen, and man. Chris and Jess teach him about sex, Carl helps him learn the emotional and mental aspects of manhood (as opposed to the more subconscious, physical side), and they all three teach him that racism and sexism are both vile. The story could be really erotic, romantic, and civil all at the same time, as the reader enjoys a thoroughly fascinating adventure. The final result would be that the reader, rather than being left depressed, is left uplifted, encouraged, and braced for another sexual, life experience.
Anything other than the same race is considered taboo. French men are "bi". White men lick pussy, black guys don't, Asian's have little dicks, Mexican's steal and rape everybody. There all sterotype's, so use all of them instead just the black men and white women. Please and as far as the rest of that crap you spouted, look around, when you have whore's, oops I meant pornstars. Like Alexis Texas, Dylan Ryder and a few others that don't fuck blackmen because their black well doesn't that blowsw the arguement you made out of the water? After all their whores, I know some of you disagree, but if you get paid to fuck on carmera or not, your a whore.
dog is right about using the black man for an evilcharacter. personally i like using black women with white men for love interests and ignore black men as characters. get them dogg and write something more will you?
I love your style and all your works and felt the same with this story! I would have liked a little more dialogue between him and Jess where she showed a little more remorse about what she did! She wanted to stay with her husband but she did t really try to change his mind.
Only my opinion! You are the author.
Expertly prepared story with emotions and contemplation of life decisions. The couple were fairly new into their marriage at under two years when this occurred. Quite remarkably, the wife engineered the swap blatantly to the husband's obvious chagrin. The ease of the seduction was out of character for a truly loving couple which definitely had plausibility issues. Sharing a romantic occasion such as Valentine's Day is quite unusual and it would be a red flag for any husband in my humble opinion. Secondly, getting high with persons you've just met is also peculiar unless you're an alcoholic or junky. The orchestration of the swap itself was extremely discomforting. There was no prior discussion or discussing during its process of happening. This was also implausible. A husband after copulation may go bizerk with his wife getting used. I didn't like this story but it was extremely well written.
I did not see racism - I saw an angry man betrayed by a wife who had no respect for him - not really. I do not think she told him the truth and never would have.
Any time people of different groups get together you will hear the question - "Ever been with a FILL IN AFFILIATION HERE". It does need to come from racism on either side, it can come from simple curiosity, as mentioned there are lot's of stereotypes - most are dead wrong - a very few have some basis in something resembling reality and there ar of course individuals who represent all the best and worst of the stereotypes and even use them to gain advantage - not because of what they are but who they are.
Here we had a couple that is age mismatched and they swing - no plans on children - with anybody - set up against a couple - one of which wants a family in the future - one of which wants more sex and entertainment now. Both couples are mismatched one pair works the other never will. Live well and separate.
I guess this cried out for a BTB ending; just plain divorce seemed like too little punishment for what she did.
and so was his sister. What kind of sister helps and covers for the cheating wife of her own brother?
I posted a comment on the wrong story! Gods DO make mistakes. Who would've thunk it?
The characters were recognizable as DG Hear characters, but were not drawn as sharply as in your other stories. BTW, half of $4,000 and $500 is not $2,500.
white and black people/beings in seperate storie, no inner mixing.
2 star
The cheater had to go! She was a liar and a cheat game over! Good story finally the white guys stands up for himself!!!
This could have been somewhat longer. I didn't feel that enough time was spent on the characters' back stories and that led to just not caring about what happened. Didn't feel any need or desire to "see her/him/them get theirs"...didn't care one way or the other that he went off to start over and presumably have his happy ever after and so on and so on. I saw a lot of potential for this story, but the way it was presented was almost clinical.
..and I agree that it could have had a braoder platform. One thing I gign´t understand, though:
" four thousand dollars in our savings account and five hundred in our checking. We'll split it down the middle twenty five hundred dollars each."
In my account it meant 2250 each...Twenty five hundred would be 2500, right?
This is not up to your high standards. We married for convenience, we lived conveniently, when she was no longer convenient, he divorced her. No love no angst, and no twist or irony.
Like to hear Jess story about this and he did not
love her anymore, so non of them worked for it.
Should have.left her in a little worse shape than he found her. Way too easy on the cheating bitch.
Should have got more revenge on the three of them,especially Carl and Chris.
I liked that there wasn’t a lot of BS. Yes, she cheated Moore than once. Yes, she set him up for a lifestyle he hadn’t agreed-to.
He also admitted that they married out of obligation; that he didn’t think he loved her; and that he questioned whether she loved him. They both understood that they weren’t at the same phase of life: him ready to be settled with a family; she still needed to party. That’s a lot of weight against their marriage lasting.
Maybe some revenge would make the story more interesting, but he was a realist and then story was quite realistic. As soon as he “owned’ having sex with Chris, he lost the moral high ground to justify revenge.
Moving on with the least possible pain was completely in character for him... although in fairness, he should have been present when she took furniture; maybe changed the locks; or at a minimum, negotiated who-got-what (or settled cash values to split the furniture). She was a shit for cheating, and a worse shit for cleaning-out the furniture. But at the same time he was a solid stand-up guy.
Not a 5-star story, but definitely a solid 4.
He needed to be rid of her. She was a cheater, a liar, and a manipulator. You can't build a marriage on that.
Second time. He was lucky to find out was a cheating whore he married early in the relationship.
Stopped reading what you forced her to be a mudshark .
Stories lose all appeal to me at that point because blacks are extremely unattractive .
The story can no longer make sense at that point to me .
One star
- Julie
From a coalburning slut to a single mother, this guy sure knows how to pick 'em.
I would have liked to see that the other come were made aware that they destroyed a marriage
Meh, I've read many of your stories. You are good writer, but either you don't know how write black people or you are just a racist
to bad, as like I said, you are a decent writer.
This is idiotic lmao. “Oh I didn’t really try to learn what gets my wife off I just put my little dick in her till I cum”.
That’s when I started praying she would cheat . Dumb fucking story
I didn't hate this but the fact that the cheating lying bitch got zero punlishment for her betrayal makes this story bleh at best.
This Femdom agitprop is very painful to me because the MC is also culpable, so easily corru. True, people are like that, but I find it upsetting.
This was kind of a boring story and none of the characters were in any way likeable.