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A little out of my comfort zone but it was a fun write. Thank you to all who vote and comment.
One of the best stories I ever read. Truly a love story, not just raw sex as so many others write. Keep up the great work.
thank you for a story that did not follow the usual boring stroke routines ... this story was a very nice read :-)
and no ... life really is not fair ... as someone who was involved with his own sister ... I know first hand how unfair life can truly be
Why not..?? Very good for a short story and I really enjoyed the read even though there was not that much sex between them ! Still a good read.!!
DG, Thanks for the incest father daughter tale, it was enjoyable reading. You should step out of your comfort zone more often. Good job
How could this pass?
"If you could be in love with your father than I was."
You need to work harder on sentence structure and word usage. Too much of it was separated into paragraphs where no breaks were needed, the dialogue was perfunctory and mostly without value. The sex was fine if you are into that and for the incest people I can see it as a pleaser. For me as 'constant reader' - not so.
Like reading a text book. Basic technical flaws distract the reader. Party's instead of parties. Than instead of then. Etc.
Forget Incest, they have no appeal for me.
Don't get too upset by the readers who can't see the forest for the trees. The spirit of the story is in the right place. A few grammatical blips and misspells can be forgiven, and I'm sure you'll proofread closer in the next story you weave for us. I especially appreciated the last sentence. As long as family members are consenting and their eyes are wide open when they get involved in relationships, though tricky and sometimes terribly bumpy, they can have a life together like anyone else. I found your story delightful and sweet. Thank you.
its such a sweet story goodonya
awesome i loved it
nice...very nice.....sort of reminds me of my step daughter and i..when her mom passed she was 17.....when she was about 20 we fell in love...and have shared a bed since.
It was left in as it was 'her' speaking her thoughts so why should I change it? If that is how DGH decided she would think then who am I to say otherwise it is, after all, his story. Any other missed typos etc I accept full responsibility for :-)
Thanks for reading and commenting though, I'm sure DGH will be pleased that you and all the others have taken the time to do so.
I found your story quite interesting and you raise a very valid point with your ending sentence. I hope you are among the 2/14/2013 winners with your submission. It's too bad that some "naysayers" have chosen to be so picky of your writing.
Who is to say what REAL love is. What with modern medicine to check for abnormalices the chances of major birthdefects is minimal and what about those instances where unknown sibilings that were adopted have married only to find out later they are brother and sister. Frankly I found it well written and very interesting. Thank you.
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