All Comments on 'Cold Fiery Night..'

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AnonymousAnonymousabout 11 years ago

Should be in the Fantasy section. No depth to characters. Sex description OK, but needs an editor.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 11 years ago
just stop

Would you stop fucking using the term "manliness." Gawd! Using a metaphor like that should be done once in a story this size. Using repetitively starts to look like you don't dare say the word penis, cock, hard-on, erection, etc. A simple 2nd read would have caught this error.

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