by xalanz
Should be in the Fantasy section. No depth to characters. Sex description OK, but needs an editor.
Would you stop fucking using the term "manliness." Gawd! Using a metaphor like that should be done once in a story this size. Using repetitively starts to look like you don't dare say the word penis, cock, hard-on, erection, etc. A simple 2nd read would have caught this error.