Your descriptive style is very good bit do not rely on spell check. Board is a flat piece of wood most commonly used in building, bored is human feeling of disinterest and apathy towards a current activity. Editors are worth the time and effort
I have high hopes for you, don't give up. comments are good to learn from negative and positive comments give you ideas on what you can improve on! It was defiantly a good start.
Thanks very much for commenting, Without your feedback I can not improve my work. I have never been very confident when it comes to writing. To see that someone thinks that my work is worth the feedback and that people are willing to help and encourage me is enough to make my day.
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