by Foxdiva9
It could have been good, but there were far too many spelling/grammar errors. I would also recommend stretching out the story a little with details or more variety in what is going on, unless you were going for something really short.
good concept but very distracting grammatical errors.
i.e. paragraph 2 line 1 "While typing she [mad] moved one [had] to her bottom to fix her short skirt,"