Nice narrative, believable people and a good kick you in the guts ending!
Porn by Arthur Miller. (Death of an Orgasm?)
In all seriousness, it's quite well-written, the narrator's voice is very clear, and the matter-of-fact way he talks about his life actually creates more pathos than florid, flowery prose. You definitely get mixed feelings for him, since a lot of his pain comes from his own bad choices...and yet, you know he can't really see that...
This one stays with you. I'm going to be thinking about this.
Had no idea what I was getting myself into when I started running down the list of contest place getters.
l don't know why but you came up with one of those memorable pieces which, as someone else said, lasts for a darn long time.
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