All Comments on 'The First Meeting'

i like this story so far. Please continue to write more.

... and this one is a classic of the genre, especially when one takes into consideration it is a first outing - at least under this name - for a new writer.

I thoroughly enjoyed this tale and I hope you will decide to continue it into second and subsequent meetings - and tell us all about them!

Very well done, welcome to Literotica thank you for sharing your talent with us and - five stars!

and a briilant first story hope you write more soon oh i was lost in my imagination and still can see those hard tweeked nipples

Thank you for your kind comments!

To clarify; this really is my first ever story. I have never written under any other names.

I have some ideas as to where our couple may go next and will hopefully put pen to paper very soon.

Great first story, made me wish I was there watching! Can't wait for the next instalment.

Very erotic and very well written. I am looking forward to more from this beautiful, sexy woman.

Finally got around to reading the story, enjoyed from start to finish, looking forward to next installment

I listened to your song as I read. Wow! is the simple summing up

I appreciate that its your first story however there is an over use of the words I and you. Try and find other ways to start your sentences.

Hi Daisy,

As readers we wish to dwell within a story or poem. This story was well-detailed and certainly told the tale; however, when considering the quality of your imagery, it felt like a photograph rather than a painting. When the reader's senses are engaged, (the goal is to have all five senses aroused) , it happens because the writer has used near-perfect word choices to define characters and create the emotional climate of the story or poem.

The origin and message of this story are entirely familiar, requiring the writer to be innovative in expression of emotion, use a bit more reserve when relating actions, consider the signifigance of each word and it's role in shaping strong imagery.

In this way, you will acomplish an immediate connection with your reader.

The experience was of great importance to you, allow your reader to experience it with you.

There are no new stories only the shining promise of old stories reinvented in imaginative and engaging ways.

Good luck with your writing,

Rapscallions girl

Will there be more? I enjoyed it and was extremely interested.