All Comments on 'Weekend Surprise'

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ythebadgerythebadgerabout 11 years ago
Dumb story

unnecessary complexity.

Frankly SpeakingFrankly Speakingabout 11 years ago
Good story, but...

why pull out? Keep track of who is doing who. I did and you got lost a fwe times. Write more and edit better. You have a good idea and it's worth exploring more fully.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 11 years ago
Good story

Group sex would be the category. Built to an all out orgy rather quickly. What was at stake in the challenge? You win the argument so what? Do the women have to agree to one of the fantasies of the guys choosing? If the girls win then what? They get to choose the fantasy? Four women and three guys, seven fantasies, two where read and everyones screwing. What happens with the other five? Now it's anti-climatic.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 11 years ago

This was too much like another story I read, called the accidental nudis cabin. Sorry.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 11 years ago
Gotta agree

Was way more complicated then it needed to be.Good concept, just needs some refinement.

26thNC26thNCover 2 years ago

That was an unfortunate mess.

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