Your spelling and grammar are elementary. You used about 17 commas in the first sentence alone which only managed to turn a simple introductory of the three characters into an unnecessarily complicated sentence. However, i tried to keep reading and give you the benefit of the doubt. I lost it after "...but what I do have is a large penis. Don't believe me if you want, but its (insert large number here) inches". I couldn't stop laughing at your bragging long enough to keep reading. 1 star lmao
If this is recounting a true story, then the storyline is what it is, and I would be thrilled to have that memory to look back on. It would have been more interesting though with a slower build up in the truth or dare, and increasing action after the shower. I enjoyed it and when reading didn't notice the writing flaws the other commenter pointed out, but they were there when I looked back.
8 1/2" long and 7" in diameter, had to stop when I got there. What does he have a nearly square dick?? How do you get a dick that's 7" wide out to urinate in a public restroom??
Maybe you meant 7 inches in circumference (around). That would be about 2 and 1/4 inches across.
7" diameter - now that IS unbelievable
''The three us of were walking back from a concert, myself, John, my then girlfriend, Cindy, and our friend who was in town for the weekend, Beth.''
I count 4, not 3.
Plus I cannot believe anyone wants to have sex after an A cappella concert.
a game (?) for idiots. It serves no real purpose other than to embarrass the person who is IT
Sure its a fantasy. i have no problem with exaggerations. So it wasnt the size of his dick that made me laugh. It was the unecessary line "dont believe me if you want but its true". Why add that? Why try to brag? Without that line, you wouldnt sound pathetic and no one would question the size.
My dick is 7 inches wide and 300 yards long...
Considering that the average width of the erect male penis is 1.5" and most "extremely large ones" (we're talking the statistical 1% here), are 3-3.5" at most, a 7" wide penis is not only an exaggeration, but a physiological impossibility. Good laugh.
Apparently some people don't know what diameter means.
Shit... yes I meant circumference. Sorry, geometry isn't my strong suit.
I won't reiterate the previous comments (you can edit existing stories, by the way); all I'll hope is that you avoid the cliches (10" cock, 38DD breasts, etc) which seem to be in favour right now.
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