More detail on the Chinese Food than the anal sex. Orgasms are mentioned and glossed over. Like 'So, they happened, so what'. Still, well told and realistic as it could be, meeting a stood-up online sexual maestro in a Chinese restaurant.
“You had me until “paying special attention to her breasts and crotch,”
After that I was laughing to (sic) hard to read any more.
Crotch seriously?”
Another drive by troll too yellow to be identified on this site so that others may respond to your belittling attacks directly. My father used to say something to the effect of “Better to say nothing and be thought a fool (on the topic at hand) than to open your mouth and prove them right.”
Yes, seriously! Maybe you are an ignoramus and the language used in this story is out of your vocabularic range (I make up new words as needed to meet the demands of the situation – my buddy Will Shakespeare use to do that frequently and is credited with coining many words in the English language –yes I knew him as I was, for a time, one of Dr. Who’s heretofore unknown traveling companions). Or maybe you are one those overly self-absorbed individuals who disdain anything that came before the point at which they attained the age of reason (which in your case may actually be a ways in the future yet). If the word ‘crotch ‘so easily threw you, maybe you had better stay away from the works of Nin, Miller, and de Sade. “I Am Curious Yellow” and “Candy” may be outside of your intellectual range as well.
the Shadow (mwaa-ha-ha-ha…sinister diabolical laughter)
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Anonymous03/03/13
Rushed, confusing and unpolished
You need to work on this. I feel that the story in general shows promise but there are a few things to iron out, for example: "...as he put on a condom and lube." is soon followed by "I felt his throbbing cock shooting his cum." Did the condom fall out and is now just stuck in her anal cavity because I'm a bit worried if it is! You need to go back and CHECK YOUR WORK.
I did enjoy it kinda odd a guy would bring laxative on a date just to have sex I mean honestly I wouldn't even do that before sex...lube and condom yes laxative no that's just odd and to crotch I read the word and have read stories where they said "he touched me down there" it was written in 50 shades of grey and I loved the seris of the 50 shades of grey.... Or is it called trilogy....hmmm idk what ever I made my point oh wiat I also was hoping for more details in the build up to the anal sex moment
English
good but ended too quick
Seemed some what rushed at the end? Otherwise good.
Crotch
You had me until “paying special attention to her breasts and crotch,”
After that I was laughing to hard to read any more.
Crotch seriously?
Did feel rushed.
More detail on the Chinese Food than the anal sex. Orgasms are mentioned and glossed over. Like 'So, they happened, so what'. Still, well told and realistic as it could be, meeting a stood-up online sexual maestro in a Chinese restaurant.
Troll much Anon?
“You had me until “paying special attention to her breasts and crotch,”
After that I was laughing to (sic) hard to read any more.
Crotch seriously?”
Another drive by troll too yellow to be identified on this site so that others may respond to your belittling attacks directly. My father used to say something to the effect of “Better to say nothing and be thought a fool (on the topic at hand) than to open your mouth and prove them right.”
Yes, seriously! Maybe you are an ignoramus and the language used in this story is out of your vocabularic range (I make up new words as needed to meet the demands of the situation – my buddy Will Shakespeare use to do that frequently and is credited with coining many words in the English language –yes I knew him as I was, for a time, one of Dr. Who’s heretofore unknown traveling companions). Or maybe you are one those overly self-absorbed individuals who disdain anything that came before the point at which they attained the age of reason (which in your case may actually be a ways in the future yet). If the word ‘crotch ‘so easily threw you, maybe you had better stay away from the works of Nin, Miller, and de Sade. “I Am Curious Yellow” and “Candy” may be outside of your intellectual range as well.
the Shadow (mwaa-ha-ha-ha…sinister diabolical laughter)
Rushed, confusing and unpolished
You need to work on this. I feel that the story in general shows promise but there are a few things to iron out, for example: "...as he put on a condom and lube." is soon followed by "I felt his throbbing cock shooting his cum." Did the condom fall out and is now just stuck in her anal cavity because I'm a bit worried if it is! You need to go back and CHECK YOUR WORK.
Hello
I did enjoy it kinda odd a guy would bring laxative on a date just to have sex I mean honestly I wouldn't even do that before sex...lube and condom yes laxative no that's just odd and to crotch I read the word and have read stories where they said "he touched me down there" it was written in 50 shades of grey and I loved the seris of the 50 shades of grey.... Or is it called trilogy....hmmm idk what ever I made my point oh wiat I also was hoping for more details in the build up to the anal sex moment
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