Keep it going. A 70 plus loyal reader.
I've been waiting on more chapters from you. Love the story and can't wait for the next one
kinda disappointed that jamie is taking such a backseat to eleanor after all they saw eachother when noone else did. then as soon as he starts winning he gets all the ass he wants and kinda kicks her to the rear.
Jamie repeatedly carried the heaviest course load of any of the students, so she has less time for Craig than what they shared in High School, where they shared the same, hard classes. They were each other's firsts, Craig helped Jamie get Emily, and Craig is her effective family right now.. Lastly, Craig and Jamie are roommates - she can walk six feet and be in Craig's bed whenever she wants and she's not shy about pushing another aside to get what she wants.
There is also the matter of Craig getting into trouble with juggling too many woman as it is. He's not 'getting away' with it.
Jamie will always be Craig's best friend. Amber is the one he loves. Part of the story is about those three and finding out if Amber can put up with a teenage Craig and if Jamie can find someone else who can handle her quirky personality.
If Jamie does end up with Craig, it will be a partnership. If Amber ends up with Craig, it will be a more traditional marriage. I don't see Craig ending up with Eleanor. In the end, she is simply more mature than he his. In theory, Craig could end up with Emily (they've lived that life before) or even Gina (not very likely due to the relationship with Mark).
One last aspect I hope to get to is their relationship once they graduate college and the inevitable moving apart happens. I have a lot of notes on this story line and I hope to explore them, my condition permitting.
You need a better editor.
I do enjoy these stories and hope you keep going - thanks for the little snippet on how you intend to flesh out the rest of this one - I hope you get to it soon.
I made it to the current end of the chronicles of Zane and found this one. I would love to see more of this series as well if you have the time.
This was fun. I am a bit worried about Gina's behavior. She may be slipping into being a slut. Or at least thinking that sex is the only way to thank people.
I do wonder when the evils cheerleaders will return.
Hope all is well and the muse is with you.
This is a good tale, and a fun read - but it's missing something - heart. For the most part, it's a series of conquests, even if it's with a familiar cast of characters; we get brief glimpses of emotions but for the most part I don't really know how these women feel about Craig - and I don't really get the sense that Craig feels too strongly about any of the women.
I love how the characters have a relationship like they do I hope soon Eleanor won't need condoms
I read all of this story today and enjoyed it very, The characters were almost believable with the exception of Craig who seems to be too good for the girls and they are too tolerant of his his behavior. Yes, I am jealous. Please continue with this as much as you can. Thank you
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