by oooGODyeahhh
Any man's fantasy woman!! Wish my fiance would do/say those things! This poem gave me a chubby!!!
Very aggressive sentiments, almost masculine in tone, four times- whew go for it, nice spelling of "scream" let's it shout,
I assume these two lines run as a couplet without space between them
"Terrific sex, Rated X
Bedroom swings, Freaky things".
These next two lines "Watch some porn, learn some tips,
Ice cube, hard nips" however seemed out of place, taking the reader out of the intense scene suggesting instruction to the reader, when the pussy here does not seem to need any. The "Let your tits bounce in his face" is a lovely image, better than a photograph. The three line finale is a good rhythmic closure.
Welcome to the party Miss O!
An extremely visual and flowing composition.Visuals and memories that remind me of the 60's and 70's...... Damn, I miss those days..... You go girl, and I look forward to reading more...
I love the feedback! I wrote this poem for fun in my teenage years and once I discovered this site, I decided to dig it up and revise it! I'm glad others are enjoying it! Your comments are definitely inspiring me to write more! The ideas are flowing! So I will have more for you all very soon! Xoxo ;-)